Outside the Garden

of endings premature

there are two in particular

there is an end to internal pains

or an end of an external burden

on our familial gardens

it's a tricky thing

not a shameful thing

does your life's work hurt to look at

with you still in it?

not even as a weed

much better to be a ghost...?

or is it something more tangible?

when you wake and it hurts to move at all

with no respite at night

despite the potions

and all the pep talk motions

in spite of all supposed remedies

the world is closed

there lies only pain

so then...

here lies two motives 

the pain or the burden

 two motives,

the burden of suffering

or suffering as a burden

released out loud

it sounds almost black and white

when lost

things tend to do that

so lost

before you go

and depart the garden

ask a friend

to help you through it

you may still leave

you may still go

you might just stay

just pick a flower

one more time

or one last time

to say goodbye 

　

Reviews

[aLittlePain]

You're writing is so consistent. I dig this. R xo

[aLittlePain]

*your.....

[Davidgeo]

Thank you Rachel.

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[Davidgeo]

Wordman.... you are embarrassing yourself beyond repair with this move. Have you lost your mind? Is it because your buddy Donald Trump is getting his a*s beat in the presidential election? I bet that's why you started drinking at f*****g 2 in the afternoon. Get help man... you need help... for real, professional medical attention. Just go to the ER and tell them you need to go into in-patient rehab, ASAP.

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[Davidgeo]

You have some very serious mental problems Wordman. It does kind of make me happy you think of me this much. This past month you've been spending a whole lot of time thinking about me... are you trying to show that you want to bang me? I'm sorry Ronald Parrish... I'm not really into closet homosexual racist bigots.

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[Davidgeo]

How can you be so blatantly racist? Everyone knows that it's you doing this.... that its been you doing this. Jesus f*****g Christ... you are the devil... seriously, you may be the devil.

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of corse i dee devil cuz i black

[Davidgeo]

Get help Ron... you need help.

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all n*****s needs help

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i do need help ... come helps me hanz jizzy ... helps me real gud

[Davidgeo]

Not you're not even trying Ronald.

I'm going to block this profile now so you can't delete all the fucked up racist comments you've left on all those poems.

See ya next time loser.

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u can't block me my n***a