Due Diligence

you don't bend

you don't

you won't

this is why you are you and only you

you won't quiver

you will stall

you do pretend

(I am everything you lack)

this is why i can't' f*****g orgasm

thinking of you

you don't share

you pretend

you emote

bullshit

this is why you are a carbon copy

(to me)

my oh my

make your own f*****g emotions

my pain grates

it is very real

you're just pretend

excavating

pandering

for the most pathetic audience

you disgust me

your secrets are weak

in the context you provide

the choices I've survived?

as i disgust you

ha, you'd piss your pants

at the mere mention

of what was once my daily life

you wouldn't call it living

or my lack of privilege

you wouldn't be caught slumming

am i not stupid enough for you?

(blocked by user)

but, what if I was a millionaire?

(you're pathetic)

You're not a person you're a movement....

　Go join your friends in the toilet

With the other s**t

　

Author's Note

Sanitized

Cigarettes and Monica Belluci.... I'm kinda surprised you'd do this to me.

Reviews

[Chip Murison]

Very interesting poem.
Sometimes your poetry is a bit like a Rorschach ink blot. I could see this from many angles. It could be you talking to yourself or you talking to someone in particular or perhaps you talking to the world in general as you see it. Or maybe those are my own reflections being evoked from an ink blot. Or maybe all of the above.
I like your introspective style. Nicely done.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Sounds like my ex-husband. Enjoyed this very much.

[Kathrin S]

I really enjoyed reading this poem. Yes, it's a little hard to decipher, but I think that's part of the point. Poems are different from stories that way - in my opinion, they're a lot freer and you can do almost anything and justify it. I especially enjoyed the beginning, I could picture this person and the relationship the narrator has with him/her.

What I wasn't so sure about were the parts in brackets. Are they really needed? This is obviously a personal preference, feel free to ignore, but I didn't find them necessary. Also, I didn't understand the (blocked by user) one.

[Davidgeo]

Parentheses, not brackets. It's something I frequently do, sometimes it works better than other times. I will be ignoring that suggestion but it's not a bad one I don't think. The block by user line is to mean ignoring or cutting someone off for shallow and superficial reasons, it is a play on this sites option to "block" other users.

[Ashwin Shanker]

you're just pretend ( i think u need to add a ing here)

The poem sounds so personal that I feel that I was reading a letter. There was absolutely no word play or any kind of message which a third party reader would be able to decipher.

[Davidgeo]

Good thing I don't really give a s**t about "third party readers" when I write. Writing is a personal thing, how I choose to express myself is how I choose to express myself. There are no hard or fast rules about including what you define as "wordplay" or why observe as having no message to decipher. Your review was not a critique is was pure ignorance. Decipher that dick nose.

[Davidgeo]

edit - "what YOU observe as having no message to decipher". Like a blind kid who swears there is no sun because he can't see it.... that's what your review reminded me of in this moment.