Reverse Frank

you know, they were never gonna put us on the first train back to Israel

i know, yes I know; we're on a train

right now

and here

we are

and there never wasn't a train; we are well traveled

i'm just convinced this may not be the one we wanted

the one for us

remember when you saved me?

corrected the inner ugly

and things

the unsavory ones

(sigh)

eh, we'd better not

we're already on the train

(we're already off the train)

cleverly

we've escaped and... well...

it's time we concentrate

time to be quiet for a spell

chase them unicorns

sweetly drift away, softly

stay asleep under her shoes, under her floor boards

do your best

drift away now, you've survived the train cars

it's time for your best

reverse anne frank impersonation

please not a peep you will make

it is what it was so it goes

down below, silence is virtue

and everywhere

survival remains as "whatever it takes"

the baseline of virtue

survives to this day

Author's Note

Yes... I am aware that Israel did not exist during World War II. Poetic license and what have you... so fuck off.

Reviews

[Nessly]

So I missed it the first time around, "so it goes," a "Slaughterhouse-five" reference?

[Davidgeo]

Aww s**t look at you. God damn it if those Tralfamadorian's aren't very hard to see.

[Nessly]

Have you read Tim O'Brian's "The Things They Carried"? It's a none-linear novel focusing on Vietnam. You may like that one as well.

[Davidgeo]

That's bordering on "old classic" these days. You wouldn't happened to be an 8th grade English teacher would you?

[Nessly]

Ha! No... It's a good read, though.

[Davidgeo]

It's been too long for me to remember properly. I'll have to consult my jr high notes.

[Nessly]

Heh... I read Slaughterhouse-five in high school too. Doesn't make it any less of a good read. :p

[Davidgeo]

read it again. it's very wonderful.

[Nessly]

Agreed. I was totally being snarky in my previous comment, though.

[Davidgeo]

So, you're an 8th grade English teacher then? I implore you... get into a little Graham Greene. "The Destructors". I think you asked me once why I write. That short story is a very significant part of it.

[Nessly]

No, no... I'm not a teacher. I've never read that particular short story. I love Kate Chopin's "The Story of an Hour"!

[Joshua Haines]

Reading poems like this. Is the reason why I like your work. Keep it up Dude.

[Davidgeo]

That's mighty kind of you.

[Gray]

I don't understand it completely but I like it. That's all I'm gonna say.

[Davidgeo]

Didn't you used to be on Hello Poetry?

Yes... you did. How about that?

[Gray]

Nothing secret about that. It did nothing for me. I'm not a writer so why should I bother.

[Davidgeo]

Pish posh... you have no need to speak in riddles here today. I was just making an observation... thanks for reading!!!

[softlyfall]

Whether or not Israel existed is irrelevant, in fact it adds to the timelessness of the sentiments to include it. The reality exists on, and truly should not ever be forgotten.
Your voice is so genuine. It gives you the power of pathos.
Never be defensive about your work. You have a wonderful gift. There will always be thise who cannot appreciate just as there will always be evilin the world. We need that counter balance. Let it roll off and believe in yourself.

[Davidgeo]

I am not at all defensive about what I write. Don't project your bullshit on me. I know what I am, how could you have any idea about that? From a few prepared words and poetry? Bullshit, you just wanna sound like a mentor. Pep talks like that directed at strangers wreak of unqualified arrogance. Go save a puppy.

[softlyfall]

I project nothing and this statement IS defensive, on your part. You had no need to respond angrily to what I offered unconditionally with an open mind and heart. That you did respond with anger is decidedly defensive. I have no need to sound like anything at all, I am secure in myself and who I am. What others think of me is not relevant to my self definition. And I am, possibly, the least arrogant human you could encounter. My life is quite humble, as is my heart and my approach to life. My manner of speaking reflects my upbringing and life experience. If you choose to be angry, that is your choice and not my repsonsibility.
In he end, we are all responsible for every emotion we allow ourselves.
I make mistakes, as I am human. But I read your comment about "I know Israel did not exist in WWll so f**k you" and interpreted that as defensive. Were you NOT defensive, you would have said nothing. That is the logical reality.
If you would like to apologize, I am open to that. If not, I accpet that you are who you are and wish you well.

[Davidgeo]

You are adorable. Don't take it to heart. I just like to f**k with people.

[softlyfall]

Hmm, wll that s actually the most interesting statement I have encountered here. I am not fond of vanilla

[Davidgeo]

Take it as you like it. It's all just a word video game... the matrix or simulacrum.

Pictures and sounds without showing anything or making a sound.

[softlyfall]

so true... but still I would rather bare my claws ad draw blood than die of boredom. At least blood is nourishing

[Davidgeo]

Blood is colorful, but what you take must not exceed what you give. Ever. Anywhere.

[Davidgeo]

For any reason

[softlyfall]

I do
I am greedy

[softlyfall]

hey I hav a plan, if you object
dig a hole and fukc it

[Davidgeo]

You will be unfortunate if you are unlucky.

[Davidgeo]

Tsk... tsk... you're a fool.

[softlyfall]

I have no need for luck
I have a great deal of money, a great deal of useful intuition, and a mensa IQ

[softlyfall]

I am no fool, little fool

[softlyfall]

Honey you are way out of your league

[softlyfall]

But you are temporarily amusing

[Davidgeo]

Are you Relic or Ron Parrish? Did Tony Mcdouche bag finally nut back up? Ha... hahahahahhaha - O, I had more s**t talk but, I just can't stop f*****g laughing at the moment....
b***h

[softlyfall]

I am thinking you ar definitely a child, or an adolescent
At any rate, you bore me

[Davidgeo]

Of all my poems why would you pick this one to trash? Do you have so little respect for tragedy? So little understanding as to what means something to more than just yourself? I'd pity you if you weren't such a fuggin pile of muff garbage.

[Davidgeo]

Get lost trash person....

[softlyfall]

Tragedy? That is laughable. You are the tragedy. You have no real understanding of Anne Frank. You are an ignorant child. Laughable
And not a very good poet, though you would hav promise if you were not so angry and defensive

[softlyfall]

Trash is the little man in Nassau with no education and no life experience who thinks he has a grasp of tragedy

[softlyfall]

you define lost

[Davidgeo]

Try not to make an a*****e of yourself further... just a tip friend-o

[softlyfall]

Again, he resort to banality and name calling.
The embarrassment is you
You are so very very small

[softlyfall]

surrender little guy

[softlyfall]

oh and as for a*****e, I can be as venomous as they come. I have destrued lives and never looked back.

[softlyfall]

you are merely boring

[Davidgeo]

A tiny man am I. So, what's your play here? Taking time to trounce the little guy? Big fella...

[softlyfall]

sure if it amuses me. I think men are quite tasty
chomp
now a real man could actually handle me, not become defensive and immature

[softlyfall]

by the way, I am having a very good time here

[Davidgeo]

I think you are perceiving things incorrectly.
Try harder... I'm sure you can come up with something better.

[softlyfall]

now you are going all copy cat on me babe
I already played that hand
try again

[Davidgeo]

This is where I leave you. Be well. Find some tiger balm or something... you seem a little fucked off.

[Nessly]

This is beautiful. It especially pairs well with your song choice. It almost reads like a love poem to me... Two star-crossed lovers who are riding on this train together. They're chasing each others' dreams only to find their dreams didn't mesh, so they must go their separate ways. I'm probably way off base here, but that is just what I thought about while listening to your song choice and reading through the poem.

I'm assuming you wrote in all lowercase purposefully but I'm not quite sure why. Nevertheless, outstanding writing!

[Davidgeo]

It is a love poem. Anne Frank is someone I've always been in love with. And for modernity's sake, she penned the very first blog. In the most tragic way possible.

[Davidgeo]

ALso, Nuetral Milk Hotel is quite close to as good as it gets. They only truly made two albums... Avery Island and In The Aeroplane Over the Sea. Over the Sea was/is something very very special.

[Nessly]

I'm currently listening to their album. They are good, beyond good.

[Davidgeo]

No one has ever told me they sucked.

[GalaxyGhost]

This is interesting and I'm still trying to find what this means to me, but say that the line that stood out best was: "remember when you saved me? Corrected the inner ugly." I really like that line for some reason.

[Davidgeo]

I think, I hope, that everyone can identify with that line. If only for the sake of self refinement.