Practical Thoughts

(Demanding cleanliness)

After the stabbing ended

Irrigation began

Red dots into large spots

Irrigating her blouse

A bright animation of red

The color makes a difference

If the blood is candy red

You have arterial blood

Which stains as well

But much less than the dark 'n dirty

Venial blood

On account of the oxygen

Arterial blood stains less

Thank you for reading

Practical thoughts

(Hey, somebodies gotta clean that s**t up)

From a practical murderer

Reviews

[Ragingriver]

Despite the fact that the poem is about murder, I still found it interesting to read. It's pacing and breaks slowed my way of reading it, and gave me room to consider the nature of the poem more. The satirical nature in these 'practical' thoughts really made me smile. ^_^ I feel it is somewhat lacking however, as this could have been expanded upon: how does one clean blood stains? Is it different when gritty or light? I mean, cold water washes normally do the trick, but I suspect a practical murderer would not go out of their way to clean up the deceased's wardrobe. Irrespective of that, it made me think, and a continuation of this poem- or an addendum- would certainly be enticing.

[Davidgeo]

I agree. This thing needs more meat.

I think this is a ripe candidate for indefinite expansion. Yes... I think I'll just keep adding weird s**t to it.

I'll take suggestions.... of course.

Have a crack at it.

[Davidgeo]

Also, I forgot to mention... thanks for mentioning my pacing and how I break things up. Bet you still can't make sensmaybee of it... ha...

[Davidgeo]

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