The Bust

.this poem has nothing to do with Ricky Williams specifically. He had a damn fine NFL career despite his side tracks. (his spirit is in here though, I can feel it)

11 for 27, one touchdown and six interceptions?

from you? who was once on the list of transcendents?

what a world

sir lead coated, supposedly fearless

dr lab coated, allegedly brilliant

what happened to you and all your transcendence?

what the f**k's up with all those interceptions?

what a world

you without glory

worse than an abortion survivor

to an ashamed set of parents

chained to 3 years by six of season tickets

Author's Note

Reviews

[1]

Standing in the pocket of life, shotgun no doubt, we survey our options. An audible here an audible there, directing traffic this way or that, a trick play inevitably up our sleeve to deceive. The world says we must score every time so to achieve this nothing is out of bounds. A flea flicker is in order, we're seemingly on the run but all to ready to pass at a moments notice, yes, I will catch them off guard, so I thought. Instead, playing right into the adversary's scheme; they went right when I assumed they'd go left, ultimately caught, picked off, again and again and again................ Am I the fool for thinking I'm smarter/better, again, I will do anything to succeed, yes, I'll even brush off all my failures with my chest sticking out, just as it has always been. I know I'm a failure but no one else has to know I truly feel this way, you can't tell me nothing (Kanye's voice)! Secretly wishing mom would have offed me with a hanger, but f**k it! I only have to live with my miserable, intolerant self for the rest of my life!

Brilliant piece, brother!

[Davidgeo]

Are you former Atlanta Falcon's running back Jamal Anderson? Sorry about your knee man... but what'd you expect? Didn't you carry the rick 400+ times the year before? That's too much rock toting.

[M]

Wow

"what a world
you without glory
worse than an abortion survivor"
This left me speechless, good job.

[meena]

Incredible piece, very moving.
Well done.

[Davidgeo]

that's what she said

[MeratheRestless]

Interesting piece you have here.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks you

[Joshua Haines]

This is a strong poem. What has a strong meaning with great words. Well done

[GalaxyGhost]

This is quite a poem with a touch of tragedy in it. I mean this a poem with more power if it is cleaned up a bit in capitalization and maybe a period mark after "Dr.". That is my take on it. I do like how this poem means something dark and has a strong emotion to it.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks for your visit. The punctuation and capitalization thing was done for effect. If you can guess why and explain why it's dog ball sweat, I'll seriously change it.

[Nessly]

I have no idea how to critique this... It's amazing. You're the champion of metaphor. This sounds like a terrible break-up to me... maybe someone the narrator had high expectations of but quickly fell. I guess it serves us well to remember not to put people on pedestals. As always, correct me if I'm way off base. I always fear interpreting your work incorrectly. It possesses a great depth, which I'm sure I often fail to reach. It challenges me in a way I strongly appreciate. Thanks.

[Davidgeo]

Thanks for taking the time to read me. Everything I write is what you make of it man, I do not own your interpretation. If I can indirectly show you anything I am happy. Pure understanding is often times overrated anyway.

[Nessly]

You're welcome. I do agree with you.