My tongue is tripping over itself trying to quickly articulate my thoughts on this piece, but then I realized I wouldn't be reviewing, Id be expressing my opinions and questions on the subject of the poem. (After all these years, too! Just shows you how oblivious I can be.) So, to the writing-
Manufactured Calamity, a brilliant title, very appropriate for this subject. I have noticed that so many times, your words bring the writer's mind to the attention of an important social or political subject that the reader needed to be reminded to contemplate. As if the reader knew about it but forgot they knew about it and how could they forget? Am I making any sense here?? I feel like my brain is stuttering.
I think your word choices in this are great. Very descriptive for a subject that is difficult to describe without resorting to the plain and simple "a******s!"
I laughed out loud after reading the fifth stanza.
I have to ask, did you consciously plan for a poetry site to be your arena or did it just sort of happen and you know a good thing...?
The review, the review! Subject, words, descriptions, grammar, spelling-all praiseworthy.
I came to shame the psychopaths... I stay because I am a better version of psychopath and it's fun t.. read moreI came to shame the psychopaths... I stay because I am a better version of psychopath and it's fun to be a psychopath.
This isn't an arena... it's a practice field.
Thanks, I kinda liked this one too.
8 Years Ago
I did forget to mention the word "bureaucracy" needs correcting. Practice, practice! lol
My tongue is tripping over itself trying to quickly articulate my thoughts on this piece, but then I realized I wouldn't be reviewing, Id be expressing my opinions and questions on the subject of the poem. (After all these years, too! Just shows you how oblivious I can be.) So, to the writing-
Manufactured Calamity, a brilliant title, very appropriate for this subject. I have noticed that so many times, your words bring the writer's mind to the attention of an important social or political subject that the reader needed to be reminded to contemplate. As if the reader knew about it but forgot they knew about it and how could they forget? Am I making any sense here?? I feel like my brain is stuttering.
I think your word choices in this are great. Very descriptive for a subject that is difficult to describe without resorting to the plain and simple "a******s!"
I laughed out loud after reading the fifth stanza.
I have to ask, did you consciously plan for a poetry site to be your arena or did it just sort of happen and you know a good thing...?
The review, the review! Subject, words, descriptions, grammar, spelling-all praiseworthy.
I came to shame the psychopaths... I stay because I am a better version of psychopath and it's fun t.. read moreI came to shame the psychopaths... I stay because I am a better version of psychopath and it's fun to be a psychopath.
This isn't an arena... it's a practice field.
Thanks, I kinda liked this one too.
8 Years Ago
I did forget to mention the word "bureaucracy" needs correcting. Practice, practice! lol