When Bed Bugs Climb Mountains

//Part of the mane.... part of the main,, Kenny Mayne? He was on sportscenter. John Dunne didn't watch sportcenter

when the bed bugs climb the mountains

when everybody knows.

it's a feeling

that no one can talk about

but everyone does feel

and no one's inside

when the soldier sings a chorus

how can i describe it

and he mocks what everyone does know

fear of another

i can say it says modular integrity is all we will ever

never have

we, this island of man, now different from the main

together we do not grasp, tis all for one in this system of none

i won't bleed for you as you couldn't see or feel it anyway

a*s hat

at least I see plenty of porno a-hoy

me mates and I have a thing for pornography

mate

irwin had nice hair

still, he was a p***y

and we are all of us yes everyone of us

       f*****g cowards

Reviews

[justdandy]

I don't know if this was written on purpose but I think that the line,
"we an island of man now different from the main" should be readjusted, like maybe.
we, an island of men, now different from the main.
And "irwin had nice hair", irwin should be capitalized.

[Davidgeo]

Observations indeed. Nothing is capitalized in the poem as you can see. Nothing will be capitalized in that poem as you should have guessed. That comma suggestion was a good one though. I think I'll take that one.

[justdandy]

Glad I could help.

[TL Boehm]

we are all ...cowards. There is the tonal quality of your writing - raw anger - a palpable seethe. It resonates through your words - but there are also moments of inescapable truth - or perhaps I just spend too much time superimposing myself over the words of others because I am so intermittent as a writer. That right there. I can look in the mirror and say I am a coward. The poem hits home.

[Davidgeo]

What can you say about the raw anger you sense? The description of that anger is the key to that thing. I also didn't polish it so much so it might be a dogshit poem without much meaning. Either way... we're both f*****g cowards.

[thecavaliar]

Morning Cheese dong.

Had a bit of time on my hands so I thought I'd have a scroll through your stuff. Got to fifty and guess how many non troll reviews you've had, 43 in all, (wow! 0.86 of a review per scribble on average,) and that includes some
so-called writers who are probably fake profiles created by you.
Reality check time Jizzy, no-one is interested, got it! so it's time to head for the hills, because this isn't getting you anywhere.

[Davidgeo]

I don't like the Robo Reviews as much... you're acting like a tele marketer now... you should feel a little s****y about that.

[Not here]

at least its reviews right?

[Not here]

tht means more money

[Davidgeo]

Yeah.. all that money we all make here... fuggin retarded

[Not here]

i make money

[Davidgeo]

If you feel you need to say you probably don't make that much... get away from me

[KittyKatgirl]

Learn to f**k off HandsJIzzy. Honestly, I've tried to be nice but when you f**k with my friends that's when I get angry as you probably can tell. Dante is an amazing writer who I am privillaged to have known a little and read his writing. And he sure has the talent to earn money from his writing. I am sure people all over the world would want to buy his books and whatnot.

[Not here]

hey jjust leave him alonr. this does no good for any of us. as ling ss nobody takes wht he says persknally we can just ignore him

[KittyKatgirl]

Ok sorry Dante I had a rage quit for a moment lol.

[Davidgeo]

Damn Dante,,, are you wasted are just f*****g retarded? And you said you make money? Ha! Not from writing, maybe selling handys to hobos for cheap behind a dumpster in a dirty alley way. You probably suck at that too