Invoking the Spirit

Poetry is dead so I'm invoking the spirit

Systemically fearless written to smear it

Lines satiric like pirates I commandeer it

No ticket no inherent permission, I'm illicit

And I know that you hear it, sometimes systemically fear it

Adherents to appearance prohibit things not inherent

To "high spirits", concepts incoherent like a parrot

A gimmick stamping morality tickets for bigots

Sometimes I can't tell if I'm a critic or cricket

Or just the nearest pirate breaking the weak on their demerits

The cowardly words, those lyrics spit from cowardly spigots

I know you're there..... I won't write without yous

You've been invoking my spirits

And they have nothing to lose

Reviews

[KTizzle]

"Poetry is dead so im invoking the spirit" I do not think poetry is dead. More like buried underneath some that might be. There is great talent on here. One has to be it and find it.

You really called some people out in the third stanza. I really did love the last line of it where it says, "sometimes I can't tell if I'm a critic or cricket." Sometimes we can't tell if we're being original or blending in with what others say.

I especially love the last line because it's so final and ends powerfully.

Lovely write again. Thanks for your friendship. I would never had looked at your poetry unless we were so.

Thanks for posting!

[GalaxyGhost]

Going along with what other comments said, the line "critic or cricket" is a good line as we tend to not want honesty in our reviews to avoid hurt feelings. I don't make much honest reviews as I would like to because one time, I was giving constructive criticism to a fellow writer in case they needed and instead, that was replied with a bunch of people calling me a 'grammar nazi' even though the writer wanted constructive criticism. Oh the irony! I am not rude when reviewing but sometimes people interprete honesty with being rude. So that's what I got to say about that and I'm glad your poem addresses that.

[Davidgeo]

It takes a certain strength to be critical here. It's something independently held, you must own yourself first. That is very difficult, but when achieved I hear a great sense of contentment overtakes you, then will be ready for battle. "Thus do I counsel you, my friends: distrust all in whom the impulse to punish is powerful!"....."There is a rollicking kindness that looks like malice." -both quotes F W Nietzsche

[Nessly]

"critic or cricket" Wow... That's a powerful phrase, especially for a writing site where most everyone, including myself, gives ornamental reviews of affection. People here seem so afraid of expressing their honest opinions.

We often times forget to find the who, what, when, where, and how while reading others' poems.

There's little left unsaid in the world, so finding something new to say is often difficult and challenging. At most, we can hope to find a new way of saying what's already been said.

[Bear]

Critique: (I know you're there..... I won't write without yous) yours

Interesting concept, it is apparent that you have a good vocabulary and understand words usage by your articulation. It is also nice to see someone writing with controversial ideas and saying poetry is dead on a poetry site is just that. I would bet that many of the people who read this will be inspired to write a poem of their own on the start of poetry. So thank you for firing up the poetry community. Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Davidgeo]

How can you not see "yous" is purposeful? Punch yourself in the face for missing that... it was important to get that. "Yours" doesn't make much sense in the overall flow and sounds quite clunky... no offense personally, but you can't critique for s**t.

Just tell me what it means to you, don't virtual clap or lavish unjust praise.... that s**t is for the weak. And never thank me, you think I do any this s**t for you? Ha..... fool. Offering praise does not mean you can spit bullshit my way and I won't say s**t about it.

[Bear]

But I thank you none the less as you accomplish more to inspire people with your hostile outburst than I could with kindness. Everyone is free to express their thoughts and the man standing in the corner yelling, will get everyone's attention and they will respond to him and may even be inspired by him but will just as quick learn to ignore then overlook him. You do for your own reason but I am still glad that you are doing it whether it pleases you or not :~)

[Davidgeo]

"Everyone is free to express their thoughts"

Can you smell your own bullshit? I don't care about your feelings. IF you choose not to read because I'm not conducive to you're way of interacting with me you lose.... not me. You.

You realize you basically just said to me... "be kind or we will ignore you".

You're a hypocrite at best. You and I write for very different reasons.

[Davidgeo]

But keep hiding behind that passive aggressive politeness.. I doubt you even know yourself what you are.

[Davidgeo]

Ah... you were correct the whole time. You shoulda been more bear like. Ate my face off.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Great use of imagery to convey your thoughts.

[Davidgeo]

Great use of a cliché review to convey absolutely nothing. I'd rather hear nothing than this bullshit.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Poetry is a canvas that invokes thoughts and images. It may be a muse for another. However to hope each review strokes your ego is a little much to ask.

[Davidgeo]

You still don't get it.... you leave that bullshit for your own ego. I don't care if you tell me everything is s**t, if you have reason I respect that. Call me the good for no reason, I will never respect that. You just do this cliché compliment horse s**t for what? Why? I don't care if you read or don't read it, I don't need to know either way. If you have something to say by all means say it, but if you just want to leave generic compliments to be seen - get lost gasbag..... I have no time for surface people like that.

[Davidgeo]

"Poetry is a canvas that invokes thoughts and images" hahahhaah What? More generic cliché's from the empty lady.

[Davidgeo]

Do you know any cherry pickers?

[EileenMarie]

Your ability to twist or alter the readers perceptions is uncanny. Great write.

[Davidgeo]

It's because I'm Batman..... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YpIQQeL2ZYk

[Davidgeo]

You have exquisite facial bone structure.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you. No one has ever described me quite that way.

[thecavaliar]

It's fun for me. Trouble is though I get bored easily and you are now boring me to tears, but I've got a job to do.

xx

[Davidgeo]

Ahhhh.... and there you are again.

[Davidgeo]

Like the cum stain on the couch... yeah, things like you happen to guys like me

[Elise Anton]

I wish there was a 'like' button. This come-back is superb! (I spelled it correctly mind you.)

[TL Boehm]

Sometimes I can't tell if I'm a critic or cricket

Or just the nearest pirate breaking the weak on their demerits
The cowardly words, those lyrics spit from cowardly spigots

That first line. Critic or cricket. That one sticks with me - Attributive to the cafe at large - there are both critics and crickets here - those who chirrup incessantly, scurrying around their little cardboard egg crates, unaware they are being gut loaded to be fed to the reptiles should they venture beyond the safety zone.
And the cowardly words - lyrics spit from cowardly spigots. I've been writing for a long time. I cut my creative canines on "lyric" poetry and a lot of it is here. I was prolific, so once in awhile the law of averages is in my favor for my early stuff and one or two of the hundreds is "ok" I write now because I usually need to vent, but most of it I know is not really the caliber required for killer poetry - which garners me largely unread but for a few denizens of the Cafe. There are wonderful poets here, in my opinion. I seek them out - but I am admittedly lazy. I write when I can and review when I can. I delete a lot of RR's because many writers including myself become stuck in a singular groove.
All this to say, when I started here, the cafe was a place for serious writers to network and develop and there were those who would give an honest if painful review. I don't see that much anymore.
Perhaps I've become a cricket myself. or maybe a squawking parrot. (found that line wonderful too)

[Davidgeo]

I like rambling reviews that have something to say.

Thanks, this adds depth to this page. You own a little of this poem now.

[Davidgeo]

Boehm is never not prime... words upon words