Were I Just a Bit More...

I didn't know it bled until I picked it off

Still I know it bleeds and yet I pick it off

Disaster knows what's underneath the cover

And what's the deal with airline penis?

Casual sex or express pass vaginal tunneling?

Country w****s and city s***s?

Masculine words...

Men who secretly hate the power a nice vagina

Truly has over every single thing a virile man considers

With language a woman becomes vile

And a man becomes a player

Guilt for the strong

Pride for the weak

How very Christian of you.

Jesus probably fucked a lot of "b*****s"

Mary was just a w***e.

Reviews

[Angela Sparks]

Overall, this wasnt the best poem I've read, but it wasn't the worst. It has no clear subject, or pattern. It has a nice beat behind the words though. I'm not exactly sure what the title is connected to the poem. About Half way down though it stays on a certain subject.
"Jesus probably fucked a lot of "b*****s"
Mary was just a w***e."
If someone were not to believe the bible, but believe Mary DID have a baby and name him Jesus, this would probably be a very realistic (though harsh) view of the situation. Like I said, not perfect, not nearly, but no one's is ever perfect. Really bold though. I enjoyed it for the short amount of time it took me to read through it.

[Davidgeo]

The subject is abstract but it's there if you look for it. Mary Magdalene is who I'm referring to, not Mary mother. I think you may be even too generous, there is a certain aimlessness to the start. I'd fix it but I don't care about this poem that much. Maybe some day I'll come back to it.