Already Dead

BAD ACROSTIC

Always forgotton but never gone
Longing to find a place to belong
Remembering all that we had
Even the empty and the bad
Always on earth but never alive
Day in and day out wishing to thrive
You've forgotton me already...

Do not repeat all your past mistakes
Especially the one with the rich and the fakes
Always remember what it was that you had
Dying alone, wasnt half bad.

Author's Note

bad acrostic...take it or leave it

Reviews

[Nick Erickson]

I'll take it. I'm not an acrostic writer but enjoy reading them and you did well with this.

"DEAD being the truest part -
D o not repeat all your past mistakes
E specially the one with the rich and the fakes
A lways remember what it was that you had
D ying alone, wasnt half bad."

[Queen of the Damned]

Actually I don't think this is a bad acrostic at all! I absolutely love it. It expresses the emotions felt extremely well. Taking the reader into the moment. I know this and have felt it before. It reminds me of some of my writings. Pain expressed through words stings, strikes and lingers forever. I look forward to reading more of your work and I added this one to my favorites.

[Accidental Stranger]

A little bit better in your works, as long as it is not love poetry you write pretty decently and you have talent that could be great.

[Wraith A.K.A. JB]

My friend, this acrostic is beautifully written. It has a punch behind it deep enough to take ones breath away.
The way you mix the emotions and blend them all into one is captivating. I can relate to and also know the pain this acrostic speaks of all to well myself. Very well written! I look forward to reading much more of your work.

-Joel-

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

There is nothing wrong with this piece at all!!
It's very sad but very elegent & beautiful!!
I really like this piece!!
Keep ur chin up!! =]

[An owl on the moon]

Powerful and moving, full of a deep sense of sadness.... So well done!

Craig

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

I think it is a very good acrostic, it flows well. Thank you for sharing. Debileah