It's Time To Go Home

I walk in the door
Hurriedly to see his face
I smile with relief
When im greeted with grace

His hand touches my cheek
And i know that im home
Always safe and sound
Never again will i be alone

His arms around my waist
His lips at my ear
The sound of 'welcome home'
Is all that I hear

He spins me around
And gives me a kiss
As his lips cover mine
I remember what ive missed

Our hands gently tangle
My heart starts to race
I cant seem to keep still
As i look upon his face

Falling on the couch
Without any care
My head rests on his chest
His fingers run through my hair

The gentle fingers start to tug
And i try to move from his grasp
His soft tugs get more urgent
'Whats wrong?' i ask

His face is confused
His tugging persists
I shake away the sleep
And see what ive missed

I awake to see the maid
Tugging at my hair
I had overslept again
And i was unaware

I rub my eyes
And look around the room
Now missing the dream
That ended too soon

I stare at my hand
That now sits alone
And to myself i whisper
'Its time to go home'

Author's Note

this is about a dream that ended too soon

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

Don't you wish you could trap those moments in a jar and wrap a "to be continued..." label around it for a later dream? I've had far too many naps and lucid sleeps that ended far too abruptly, but, that's life.

What makes this poem so good, is the twist you pull on the reader. You did a wonderful job of hiding the essence of the poem until the end, when the tugging of your hair turns out to be the action that penetrates both worlds, it ineveitably pulls you into reality. Those last three stanzas make the entire poem work well.

Have a nice day!

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

Such dreams are often times the best and the worst.. Your words flowed over one another nicely and your rhyming scheme was well worked. You were able to capture the readers attention and draw them in with your story.. Wonderful work!

[forfila]

It is time to go home sweet, I loved this read, so pure and deep.. Nicely done :)

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Me

[Brooke_Alyse]

I love poems that tell stories and yours was a best by far.

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WoW! Aww. Very loving, and twas sad that it ended too soon. But, i guess having a beautiful dream like that tells you that he's alright, and that he will come home soon, and take u in his arms and hold you forever :) Like a premonition or somethin' ;)

Mikey

[Joseph - Michael]

Yeah, I hated when that happened; Having such a wonderful dream until you get waken up by something else and you wish you could stay asleep for the rest...

"There's no place like a home" ~ Wizard of Oz (lol)

On the other hand, you wrote it so nicely and well detailed, so it's all good here...