Accomplishment

About happiness and excitement of reaching goal

I wanna fly very high n touch the sky

Heart in heat n I m ready to defeat

Beat the crows and sparrows

M close to my victory n make the history

There is heap pain in my vain

That I m unable to explain

This is the excitement

Of being close to accomplishment

Reviews

[Pushkar Prabhat]

nice job!!!
it needs work but indeed a good short poem!
i liked it!!!
keep writing and sharing!!!
all the best!
:)

[Roger Turgeon]

Your joy comes through in this poem. I can tell from both the poems of yours that I have read that you want to fly high. It could use some work on grammar and structure but I take it English is your second language. Keep writing. ( : O )

[Lippi Madan]

Thanks a lot!!! I'll work on the areas u recommended.