Lady of the Sea

My tears ... drew
the well of my soul, to cry
a virulent verdigris.
The blue ... flew
from my eyes into the sky,
from sky to cover the sea.

My heart ... beat
and love's tumultuous force
quickened with shadowy night.
The love ... heat
smoldered an infinite course
of sweet tongues and bruised delight.

My skin ... burned,
thirsty wave in lover's dance,
flame in a thicket of fire.
The moon ... turned
between shadow and stance.
Silhouettes whispered desire.

My mouth ... kissed
your succulent form burned ripe
like an ultimate peach.
The night ... blissed,
harmonies played on a pipe,
as firm as wood on the beach.

My tongue ... found
the moist fervor of your mind,
geyser flooding from the tip.
The words ... bound
were delivered, unconfined,
as I touched them with my lip.

My love ... slept
in the circle of my arms.
Night folded wings over lea.
My eyes ... wept
for I was touched by his charms.
Conquered Lady of the Sea.

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Very nice. I find your comparison of a woman to the sea, or water, a recurring theme in your poems. And it is very appropriate, too. I find something innovative in every poem of yours, and this is no different. The use of the ellipsis in the 1st and 4th lines of each stanza gives them a unique flow. I like all the descriptions here, except this one :
"My tongue ... found
the moist fervor of your mind,
geyser flooding from the tip. "
That was kind of.. strange.
But that doesn't detract from the elegance of the write. Great job again!

[FlawedByDesign]

I have to agree with Dinesh, in that this seems to me one of your earlier poems. It's definitely different than your other ones. Seems to be missing that sparkle, the finishing touch. It is by no means bad, just different :)

Somehow this poem makes me think it may have be a precursor to "The ocean is a woman". Same topic at hand, though taken in a different direction.

[Dinesh Sairam]

Hmm.. I guess this is one of your earlier poems? The 'magic' that was present in your other poems, I didn't find it here. But, I don't say this is bad. Indeed, it's flamboyant, nice usage of words. I loved the words "for I was touched by his charms.
Conquered Lady of the Sea" :) The poem gives a comfy feeling when reading :) A complete Sit-back read. Kudos. Keep writing.