“Be like a tree, and let the dead leaves drop.” ~ Rumi
I dream I fall into oblivion in a shower of wings, blooms, and ashes, floating in depths of blue meridian blue as the inkwells beneath my lashes. I am weightless in a glittering swirl of visions in time that mark the ages and let loose the hand of that little girl who wrapped herself in handwritten pages. I surrender to a different sky. My heart is bursting into beams of light and shatters each myth, each untruth, and lie until my spine is uplifted in flight. I sever the cords of conflict and strife stepping into the after of my life.
Although it is tempting to conclude the "after" of the title means death, I think the poet is actually referring to a different stage of this life. Letting go of the hand of the little girl means releasing the viewpoint of a younger self, surrendering to "a different sky," and adjusting to the changes of the years. Perhaps certain goals must now be put aside in this adjustment; that may be the meaning of the last two lines. The quote from Rumi also points to the theme of adjusting to change. Very philosophical, very nicely rhymed and worded piece here.
We are forever morphing, changing, becoming. Yes, it can be scary to change, but we must if we are to thrive in this world. We find out things we believed are not true and things we doubted are facts. What a wonderful write this is! We must accept some things in life. Lydi**
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Thank you for visiting with me, Lydia. I appreciate your thoughts.
Wonderful use of words and thoughts. I have read all Kosinski books. He lived a hard life and he try to seek better places. I wonder, did he? He killed himself. I liked your thoughts and logic. I pray there is a better place for us, one day. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 5 Years Ago
5 Years Ago
Thank you. I have never heard of Kosinski, but my father killed himself. I believe there is a bett.. read moreThank you. I have never heard of Kosinski, but my father killed himself. I believe there is a better place. I think we have to.
5 Years Ago
Kosinski, a great writer and I am sorry for your loss. Suicide steal the best from us.
Another wonderful sonnet. I felt you stepping out of the old clothes of your former self. Naked you are ready to begin again. Happier and burden free. Very nicely done Linda Marie. I am liking your poetic voice.
Thank you, Chris. It seems that sonnets are the "thing" this week, this being the third for me. I .. read moreThank you, Chris. It seems that sonnets are the "thing" this week, this being the third for me. I went through a period many years ago where all I wrote were sonnets. It's nice to return to a form that guides me gently, reminding me to focus. It's nice to see you.
5 Years Ago
They certainly make you focus :)
5 Years Ago
Yes. It's actually a good thing for me. It forces me to really put quality into each and every lin.. read moreYes. It's actually a good thing for me. It forces me to really put quality into each and every line so I really focus on the words in such a small space. My feelings, at times, flow like a river. Sometimes, I need the structure to force a stop.
It has been a while since I have been reading much poetry on here, I think I read your work before? I think you changed your profile picture or something and my memory sucks lol. but yeah teach me to whisper (which I am also going to review is one of my favorite poems of all time. this one is more subtle and has an Emily Dickenson vibe. I haven't done a deep reading of it yet but it also in passing reminds me of Christina Rossetti. I may be off base here but it seems on some level to be about you coming to terms with your work (and I suspect yourself,) and planting the flag on the moon saying this is mine as long as there is remembering I will not be forgotten. it seems like a necessary poem in your growth because it is good to have confidence. especially when you write as good as you do. most of my review is based on assumptions from reading your other work so I will apologize if I am off base, but it is a great poem. my only real complaint is I don't know if it would be as engaging without being familiar with your other writing. I think I am rambling and I apologize. but thank you for reading this.
Thank you, Drew. You are correct, I did change my avatar. This poem is about letting go of the pas.. read moreThank you, Drew. You are correct, I did change my avatar. This poem is about letting go of the past, the shattered fragments of the old me, stepping into the now, the new me. Being like a tree and letting the dead leaves drop. :-) Thank you for reading, sharing your thoughts, and for your kind words about "Teach Me To Whisper." If you like that one, you might also like "Love Made Me," as it was written in much the same vein.
5 Years Ago
I think I reviewed that one, I just haven't been on here very much lately. your one of my favorite w.. read moreI think I reviewed that one, I just haven't been on here very much lately. your one of my favorite writers and I find we have many aesthetic stances, or at least a approach that is similar. Though I have been going through a process of trying to mix my love of folk doggerel verse and more traditional free verse as of late. also have you ever read my poem clergy tree? That is one of the few I have written that I am proud of. and am curious what you think of it?
5 Years Ago
Clergy Tree doesn't sound familiar, but I will be sure to check it out.
Poetry has been my passion since I was about fifteen years old, and I love the structure of rhyme and meter moreso than just randomly throwing words upon a page without any form whatsoever.
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