I Open A Vein and Rain

Leaves begin their slow descent,

scattered between pages of blue and green,

while others cling to a life they can no longer live.

I feed the fire and see what I have seen -

his sweet smile smiling - and I can easily forgive

this unrelenting torment.

 

I close my eyes to listen,

and I can hear his laughter in the rain.

He will never know how much I loved to hear him laugh!

An echo, and I hear him laugh again!

It’s funny how the mind becomes the heart’s telegraph,

beguiling tears to glisten.

 

I embrace a silent world,

whose breath is but a whisper of his name,

and bleed into greener days when I danced in the sun.

I know that things will never be the same.

For me, he was and ever will be the only one,

my little love flag unfurled.

 

I will never love again.

Under a slab of stone, I’ll love him still.

Have no doubt of the earnestness of this narrative!

When the sun sets over the frozen hill

and others cling to a life they can no longer live,

I open a vein and rain.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

A very deep and well written piece. I really like the title.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Thank you. I well imagine that the title would make for a great song. :-) I appreciate the feedback.

[Rob Santana]

Exactly what I said about the title!!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I open a vein and rain
to release the sorrow and pain.
I open my soul to bleed -
a declaration of my need.

[Rob Santana]

Can we be friends??? hahahahahaha!!! I love those lyrics. I write lyrics as well but mostly death metal lyrics. I do have lyrics that are far from metal more relaxed, expressive.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

LOL! Believe it or not, I actually began writing by writing songs, which, over time, evolved into poetry. I think it's a natural progression as both are very similar.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the imagery is so stark in this...amazing write of the torment of losing a loved one.

beautiful poetry.

jacob

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Thank you, Jacob. To be honest, this poem didn't pan out as planned; and I think it's one of the few that I will actually have to revisit and rewrite at some point. I appreciate your feedback. :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes "not as planned" is best...natural....over tinkering can often take away from the fluidness and smoothness of a piece...and it can tamper with the emotional effect...
but we are poets, and often feel that our pieces are never done...that revision needs to be a constant.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I love this, Linda! I thought it was well written, and beautifully versed.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Thank you for reading and for the feedback, Kelly. I think this one could have been much better though. :-)