Loves Lasting Melody

Just another poem of love

The relentless winds of time
Have enfolded us
Both you and I.
Remember the days long long ago
When we were young
Vibrant.energetic in our love

Days passed so slowly
They were days of sweet rapture
We lived inside a bubble
Like naked cherubs
Laughing, loving with all we had to give.

Often we would lie entangled
In aromatic emotions
(Did we ever come up for air?)
We became one
In all that, that could possibly mean

Now those years have fled
Passed us by
(time does that)
Yet still we hold onto each other
You with grey upon your head
Myself a little less hair
And a paunch
Perhaps a little stooped.

But I look at you now
And still that twinkle is clear in your eyes
As you say
"It's late my love come to bed"
And It's only half past eight

Reviews

[Enigma]

Beautiful and heart-warming poem. The work with imagery and metaphor is amazing and the simple, subtle but profound depiction of love was relly impressive. Well done.

[?]

Oh I loved this, you described true love, the aging of the love of two so perfectly.
And the ending, now that was good.
Loved the flow and the poem as a whole.
Amazing

[realmwriter]

And so it went that the old man went to bed with his wife and the two of them passed in slumber to a place of no pain or tears. Very good write here. Very surreal.

[Day Dreamer]

Wonderful. Just truly wonderful and amazing. Keep writing! :)

[Liza]

the recognition of love's end or death is the sense of urgency and appreciation of this declaration; unfortunately or fortunately - the trigger to declare with a sense of intensity...losing love; mourning and celebrating love.

[SamBug]

This was so beautifully written. Great job!

[Poetic Beauty]

Just because we grow old doesn't me we can't have romantic passion in our veins. It just means we have to do it a little slower and earlier in the night.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for the amazing poem. Age may take the body. But mind still desire to dance the dance of passion and romance. I like how you told the story in the poem. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sukriti Suki]

Wonderful! Love overflows from this piece...Did we ever come up for air.....nice!

[lifesmith]

this piece erupts with so much emotion right from the start. You have a way with words that grips the heart in so much feeling