Chasing Clear Water
A Poem by
Linear
Out of body experiance (Or mind)
Standing here on the edge of a precipice looking down at broken rocks water never touched What has my life become but an ongoing search for a rainbows end dreams without schemes plans with little chance A handful of fairweather friends that drifted quickly when I needed a hand Clouds rolled in dark and dim icy needles rained down piercing my skin oh those winds blew but what could I do Where could a man turn where could he look to seek the peace he wanted so much standing before him on steep mountain top An angel a woman adorned with incandescent hair and eyes of clear water beckoning me there I took the step held out my hand no ground beneath me but she held my hand
© 2011 Linear
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I love the whole flow throughout this poem! IT makes readers forgot all the things around and just deeply absorb by your poem! Amazing job! Also, I love the ending most! Its just so simple, so beautiful! The imagery is great as well!
powerful and strong, amazing job!
Posted 13 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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this is a beautiful peace with great description that gave me chills.
Posted 13 Years Ago
this is a beautiful peace with great description that gave me chills.
This just has the lovliest touch...it gives a sense of hope in times of sheer desperation...I love the message here. Thanks for sharing...
Posted 13 Years Ago
This just has the lovliest touch...it gives a sense of hope in times of sheer desperation...I love the message here. Thanks for sharing...
It is often when we feel as if we have lost everything, stand without hope, see more darkness than light, we do have an epiphany moment as your describe in your write! Your thoughts of despair, and abandonment are turned to those of hope as you behold your woman adorned with incandescent hair, who took the step and held your hand as your stood with no ground beneath you!.... beautiful expressions of encouragment to others who are in the midst of such a time!
Posted 13 Years Ago
It is often when we feel as if we have lost everything, stand without hope, see more darkness than light, we do have an epiphany moment as your describe in your write! Your thoughts of despair, and abandonment are turned to those of hope as you behold your woman adorned with incandescent hair, who took the step and held your hand as your stood with no ground beneath you!.... beautiful expressions of encouragment to others who are in the midst of such a time!
wow, this was magnificent with such awesome images...I absolutely love that last verse...it took my breath away...and life begins...I also love the opening is it so profound...this has incredible depth...simple beautiful and outstanding work...
Posted 13 Years Ago
wow, this was magnificent with such awesome images...I absolutely love that last verse...it took my breath away...and life begins...I also love the opening is it so profound...this has incredible depth...simple beautiful and outstanding work...
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
somehow the search stops, when one surrenders all..and yes u are correct.2 keep each other warm..loved the read hun.ty
Posted 13 Years Ago
somehow the search stops, when one surrenders all..and yes u are correct.2 keep each other warm..loved the read hun.ty
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
by the way, it's "precipice" not "presipice" :)
Posted 13 Years Ago
by the way, it's "precipice" not "presipice" :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
when you are just at the point of no return..your angel steps in to hold you..beautifully written..
Posted 13 Years Ago
when you are just at the point of no return..your angel steps in to hold you..beautifully written..
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Life has a way of finding a special place and a precious being and the emotions behind this poem prove it. To find hope is quite, quite beautiful ..
Posted 13 Years Ago
Life has a way of finding a special place and a precious being and the emotions behind this poem prove it. To find hope is quite, quite beautiful ..
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
excellent!
Posted 13 Years Ago
excellent!
This was an amazing poem. You really have a way of making the reader feel calm and peaceful, I find.
A wonderful poem!
Posted 13 Years Ago
This was an amazing poem. You really have a way of making the reader feel calm and peaceful, I find.
A wonderful poem!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on February 27, 2011
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Linear United Kingdom
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