Chasing Clear Water

Out of body experiance (Or mind)

Standing here on the edge
of a precipice
looking down at broken rocks
water never touched

What has my life become
but an ongoing search for a rainbows end
dreams without schemes
plans with little chance

A handful of fairweather friends
that drifted
quickly
when I needed a hand

Clouds rolled in dark and dim
icy needles rained down
piercing my skin
oh those winds blew but what could I do

Where could a man turn where could he look
to seek the peace he wanted so much
standing before him
on steep mountain top

An angel
a woman adorned
with incandescent hair
and eyes of clear water beckoning me there

I took the step
held out my hand
no ground beneath me
but she held my hand

Reviews

[Cynthia]

I love the whole flow throughout this poem! IT makes readers forgot all the things around and just deeply absorb by your poem! Amazing job! Also, I love the ending most! Its just so simple, so beautiful! The imagery is great as well!
powerful and strong, amazing job!

[Joiedevivre]

at last the comfort of stability. I know this poem all too well. Brilliant!

[lifesmith]

somehow I find this very cathartic...reading it over and over...

[erikaguest]

This poem works so well. It's rhythm is really fluent, and the words just fit together so perfectly. This is great work. 'What has my life become, but an ongoing search for a rainbows end, dreams without schemes, plans with little chance' - I love this verse. I think many people can relate to this in one point of their lives or another. I know I can. Beautiful poetry :) well done.

[LovelySparrow]

Excellent flow and great diction. Beautiful piece :)

[Ruth]

And we sometimes have to follow the hand that guides, too much do we fear following the heart/intuition more than the mind! To experience this, is to know other realms await to assist us!

Excellent piece love!

xx

[An owl on the moon]

There is an overwhelming sadness that washed over me like waves... relating too well to that rainbows search... And yet, those last lines breathe out like a fire... life being renewed by an angel... floating... Heart so still in that thought.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Beautiful! Life gets us doesn't it.. I feel your words deeply.
Wonderful images you draw.. angels are every where.. and this one came just in time.

Chloe

[Stacey]

How beautiful and sync with my thought pattern this night! Wonderful flow and meter. The title drew me in....the words blew me away:) I feel as though I have been chasing those rainbows for eons and I am sooooo tired. Wonderful write!

[Liza]

Linear...what an ironic name for someone who is not so linear ~ and i mean that as a compliment - your writing has a style of grasping things that can not be touched only felt - emotions and imagery jump out of the page.

[Alicia™]

Beautifully written, as always. Both the flow and imagery is beautiful...