Naked

A little depressing sorry, but we cant always be happy, or can we? ok pass me the white powder lol

The strong winds rip
into naked flesh
I feel alive as she caresses
like the fingers of a lover
exploring everywhere

Sea spray over skin
stings
yet excites senses I thought long dead
breath catches
fragrance of long ago dispatches
letters you wrote
cast into this whirlwind of forgotten desires

Feel the wind, hear it's call
its haunting song
is it now calling me?
sand beneath feet
run it says to me, into the cold blue sea

Naked I swim
salt over skin
wind driving me, calling me
tears mingle with the salty deep
electrolights weep
as I dive into oceans waves

Feel the shark bites
at end of life

Author's Note

OK I'm sorry

Reviews

[Crowley]

Good question before the poem, I would think not seeing is how happy is a contextual feeling. One can be happy getting off of death row and just serving a life sentence I suppose knowing that tomorrow you are not going to die. And I think thats a good point to make because when we put alot of our problems up against other problems we see in the world, we might feel a little silly wanting to end it all. But I think some of us are built without the ability to see a bigger picture and the sides of the cage hold us in, even though the door to the cage is unlocked. Great writing...gets me thinking.

[claudia1201]

the bite, has to heal somehow, makes me wanna float..eyes to the sun..

[Terra]

so sad to think of you in pain;yet no apology required.love the way u write.;)

[OT]

I agree with Kerry!! definitely one of, if not your strongest poem!! brilliant descriptions, and allusions! great metaphors - the notion and infliction of pain so cruel like the wash of a wave in that bitter water!! nice!

[Kerry O'Connor]

Ooooh!! I think this is my all-time fave of yours. I love the references to the salty sting of the sea, the naked swim in cold water with the teeth to cut from below. What a metaphor for the pain and pleasure of relationships.

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know. Better ways to commit suicide then the ocean. The coldness of the sea will take you slowly and painfully. A very strong story in the poem. The ocean can teach many lessons. Death should be the last one. Like when someone toss your ashes in the ocean for your last journey. A sad poem.
Coyote

[Disillusioned]

Good write, no apology required.

Pain... inevitable
suffering... unnecessary

[luciddreamer]

So sad..and so well written.

Peace
robin

[Ladysue]

Oh this was sad, but you wrote it so well. I truly love this part...

Sea spray over skin
stings
yet excites senses I thought long dead
breath catches
fragrance of long ago dispatches

I thought you did an excellent job on this...

[J.M]

As with the others i fail to see what you are apologising for. If it's because the poem's is quite depressing then why apologise, we all write depressing things sometimes. Though to me it felt more like acceptance and compulsion than depression. An interesting write, very passionate an a dramatic ending. Good job!