Waiting

WHY?

Sitting here, just waiting and hoping for my phone to ring
but I know it wont, not even a text

A bright warm sunny day
children at play
pretty girls in summer frocks
dogs barking, people laughing

Yet for me all is silent, waiting, hoping
will she call, will she come
ice cream vendors
sail boats on the lake

Butterflies and bumble bees
crickets chirp
musical larks fly by bye bye

Flowers fragrance on the afternoon breeze
but no ring a ding
no text

I wait I hope and wait some more
a certain scent
a girls sensual laugh
hands over my eyes
"Guess who?"

Waiting over.

Reviews

[Alicia™]

I always find it such a waste when I spent a beautiful day being nervous or having negative emotions… But that's irrelevant to this.

The imagery is good and overall I liked it. I didn't quite get the last part though. I can't figure out if the girl did come and so the waiting was over, or if you got sick of waiting and decided to just stop...

[Chelsea]

Love it :) I get this feeling sometimes.... Of this land, where I'm stuck. Just waiting, never moving forward. So I relate well!
But I love the second to last stanza! Very cute!
Playful and yet meaningful! Well done!

[Ladysue]

I love absolutely love the ending...nice surprise indeed...I love the way you did this...it had playful cute tone...good work...

[Cynthia]

I love the last rwo staza, the surprise ending makes reader smile, And its sucha cute write, the twist in between this poem is absolutly fantastic!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the last three lines in this poem. The waiting is agony then she surprises you by showing up rather than calling. I wasn't expecting the twist at the end.

[xjust-for-me.x]

a wish..a hope..is full filled.. a nice sweet poem.

[Corinne]

Such beautiful warm surroundings, but inside you're still waiting not for summer, but for her. I love it.

[Esoteric Strand]

Fairly straightforward poem, no frills. I liked that bit about the lark flying by bye bye. Some of the images I found to be a bit cloying, but overall, pretty good.

[Magdelena]

Hah. Love that last line! Waiting over.. Yea. Now is she there? Hmm, all i know is I can relate to this one. On a different note of course, but been there done it.

Oh yea.

Mags xx

[sarah]

Man can I relate to this wonderful write!

[Marie Harrison]

Ha! This is cute. I love the descriptions. Felt like I was there.