Waiting

WHY?

Sitting here, just waiting and hoping for my phone to ring
but I know it wont, not even a text

A bright warm sunny day
children at play
pretty girls in summer frocks
dogs barking, people laughing

Yet for me all is silent, waiting, hoping
will she call, will she come
ice cream vendors
sail boats on the lake

Butterflies and bumble bees
crickets chirp
musical larks fly by bye bye

Flowers fragrance on the afternoon breeze
but no ring a ding
no text

I wait I hope and wait some more
a certain scent
a girls sensual laugh
hands over my eyes
"Guess who?"

Waiting over.

Reviews

[Alicia™]

I always find it such a waste when I spent a beautiful day being nervous or having negative emotions… But that's irrelevant to this.

The imagery is good and overall I liked it. I didn't quite get the last part though. I can't figure out if the girl did come and so the waiting was over, or if you got sick of waiting and decided to just stop...

[claudia1201]

love it..the view, has me smiling

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't like waiting. Allow the mind to worry and create new concerns. A very good poem. Your description made the story in the poem come alive. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Undying Glory]

great writing here, this was real nice work. i love how you've written this very good write, this was pretty vivid and cool. i love how you've written the waiting parts, that longing in your words makes this real great. good job here!
"I wait I hope and wait some more
a certain scent
a girls sensual laugh
hands over my eyes
"Guess who?"

Waiting over."
great words!

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Damn!! how can we get so fixated on a simple gadget and forget where we are and why we are there but i like how you ended it..sweet and happy..again enjoyed reading.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

And here I thought this would have a sorrowful ending. Now aren't you glad she didn't call and just give you a distant voice or worse--a text? Nothing like simple, positive poetry that makes you sigh and smile in the end.

[Alicante lullaby]

wow...such a warm write and a perfect way to end the waiting..

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ahhhh...loved the ending..mobiles phones are a curse..stops you from getting on when your waiting for a call....

[JanieB]

This is sweet.

[Lindsey]

That's cool. I like how it explains how they feel in all of what's happening. The ending is my favorite part :P