The night before

A very short story, a who done it maybe, or not as the case maybe

Sitting on the edge of my bed
head bowed, trying hard to remember
the night before.

Had we fought?
eyes sore, I looked down at the floor
strewn with empty beer cans and cigerettes.

Carpet stained, with red puddles
a knife I hold in my hand
dropping it, it clatters on the floor
splatters bloodstains up the wall.

A tear runs down my cheek
footsteps approach my door
loud

Knock Knock

Arrested now, bound in chains
if only I could remember
the night before.

Author's Note

Never take anything for granted

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

This reminds me of a story by Stephen King called Strawberry Spring. The details are scary. Makes you think about how much you drink when you are angry.

[luciddreamer]

Very nicely written....

Peace
Robin

[MuSe Ampoule]

Crazy how somethings we do can lead us into doing things we later regret. Too often alcohol does this and people hid behind it. But some acts are so severe that no apologies can mend. I can't remembers offer little in the way for an excuse.

Brilliant work here. A blink in time in the mind and life of one mess-up too many.

[thundergod]

WEEL WRITTEN PERFECTLY DESCRIBES MY STATE OF MIND

[Caleb Clark]

Nicely done. I enjoy your unconventional style and how the story is told in poem format. I can't find anything really wrong with it. Its just a good, no great, piece of flash fiction.

Well done.

[Sunflower 20]

short, sharp and simple, nicely done. :)

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Very sad tale this is. One that I would feel certain has happened many times.
You have a nice flow and a wonderful message. "Never take anything for granted".
A very good job.

Chloe

[xjust-for-me.x]

No never take anything for granted. and i have to agree with post below very sinister write.

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Gosh! didn't see that coming!!! What a sinister write. They say that some people get the red mist and cannot remember anything they have done..maybe the reality is the mind just shuts it out

[OT]

short but great!! very nice!! well written, and good imagery!!