Bitter Sweet

Test the water, lest it be to deep

Stay far away from me now,
dont try to taste these tears
for bitter they are.

Dont come close, stay clear from my darkened shadow
for only ice winds blow there
steer far from my rage, from this anger
for where once peace and tranquillity languished,
now hatred rules supreme

I gave you love
you took it
didn't look back as you shook it
begged me to come back, and I came,
only for you to say that I was to blame.

Go far away from me
lest I should perhaps harm thee
dont I pray pity me
for your sister is being
Oh so good to me!

Reviews

[MYSELF]

Linear,


A really thoughtful work...
keeping away from the darker side..
The lines:
I gave you love
you took it
didn't look back as you shook it
begged me to come back, and I came,
only for you to say that I was to blame.

were so touching and realistic that I could easily relate to the feeling contained..

Thank you for sharing such a great write..

Regards,

MYLIFE

[Princess3Morag]

Nice rhyming and it perfectly describes the relationship :) Like the ending^^

[J.M]

A fantastic poem full of anger pain and love, with an ingeniously ironic twist at the end.

[Coyote Poetry]

Last line made the poem complete. I like the description of pain and turmoil leading to the very good ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

A great ending. Full of powerful words and images, good job

[.]

LOL..b***h slap at the end...wonderful..your rhyme and meter is perfect

[Moflo]

Wow great ending! I can really relate to this and I think it came out really good.

[Alicante lullaby]

i totally love the ending...sisters are interesting creatures...

[Marie Harrison]

Powerful poem. Love the ending the most. No matter what type of relationship, no one wants their ex to go to their sister. Great poem!

[Cynthia]

what an cool ending! It makes me laugh a bit, and yes, same as what others say, a excellent flow!

[Undying Glory]

this sure was cool and interesting work, i really liked this one. i must agree, that ending sure is unexpected, nice work on that.
"I gave you love
you took it
didn't look back as you shook it
begged me to come back, and I came,
only for you to say that I was to blame."
nice words!!