Bitter Sweet

Test the water, lest it be to deep

Stay far away from me now,
dont try to taste these tears
for bitter they are.

Dont come close, stay clear from my darkened shadow
for only ice winds blow there
steer far from my rage, from this anger
for where once peace and tranquillity languished,
now hatred rules supreme

I gave you love
you took it
didn't look back as you shook it
begged me to come back, and I came,
only for you to say that I was to blame.

Go far away from me
lest I should perhaps harm thee
dont I pray pity me
for your sister is being
Oh so good to me!

Reviews

[MYSELF]

Linear,


A really thoughtful work...
keeping away from the darker side..
The lines:
I gave you love
you took it
didn't look back as you shook it
begged me to come back, and I came,
only for you to say that I was to blame.

were so touching and realistic that I could easily relate to the feeling contained..

Thank you for sharing such a great write..

Regards,

MYLIFE

[Lindsey]

A++

[Tasha]

Well delivered poem that was wonderfully crafted.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

well thought out and delivered poem!~

[dora]

great piece.

[Day Dreamer]

Well written and easy to relate to by many people. I feel the same way, except the one about the one to blame. But anyways... Keep writing! :)

[Poetic Beauty]

for your sister is being oh so good to me. That is a slap in the face if I have ever seen one. It is strong and powerful. It is bold and in your face. We say and do many things in anger that we would not normally do. It sounds like the narrator was provoked into this reaction. Bold write.

[claudia1201]

glad uve found a good sister..be blessed

[An owl on the moon]

You paint a vivid world of love and loss so well... There is the looking back.. the pain from the rejection... and finally, the turn of events... Powerfully voiced...