Bitter Sweet

Bitter Sweet

A Poem by Linear
"

Test the water, lest it be to deep

"
Stay far away from me now,
dont try to taste these tears
for bitter they are.

Dont come close, stay clear from my darkened shadow
for only ice winds blow there
steer far from my rage, from this anger
for where once peace and tranquillity languished,
now hatred rules supreme

I gave you love
you took it
didn't look back as you shook it
begged me to come back, and I came,
only for you to say that I was to blame.

Go far away from me
lest I should perhaps harm thee
dont I pray pity me
for your sister is being
Oh so good to me!

© 2011 Linear


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Linear,


A really thoughtful work...
keeping away from the darker side..
The lines:
I gave you love
you took it
didn't look back as you shook it
begged me to come back, and I came,
only for you to say that I was to blame.

were so touching and realistic that I could easily relate to the feeling contained..

Thank you for sharing such a great write..

Regards,

MYLIFE

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A++

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well delivered poem that was wonderfully crafted.
♥ Ta'Shandra

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

well thought out and delivered poem!~

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

great piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well written and easy to relate to by many people. I feel the same way, except the one about the one to blame. But anyways... Keep writing! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

for your sister is being oh so good to me. That is a slap in the face if I have ever seen one. It is strong and powerful. It is bold and in your face. We say and do many things in anger that we would not normally do. It sounds like the narrator was provoked into this reaction. Bold write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Linear,


A really thoughtful work...
keeping away from the darker side..
The lines:
I gave you love
you took it
didn't look back as you shook it
begged me to come back, and I came,
only for you to say that I was to blame.

were so touching and realistic that I could easily relate to the feeling contained..

Thank you for sharing such a great write..

Regards,

MYLIFE

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

glad uve found a good sister..be blessed

Posted 13 Years Ago


You paint a vivid world of love and loss so well... There is the looking back.. the pain from the rejection... and finally, the turn of events... Powerfully voiced...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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