Memories in muddy clay

Another ramble, through intermediate and undetermined thoughts

Butterflies, buttercups and dandylions too
roses and hyacinths, violets blue
all come together to remind me of you.

Gentle breeze, brings the fragrance of dew
 warm summer days
and distant haze
bluebells blossom in shady glade.


Bird song echo's
along leafy groves
 girls walk by in their pretty clothes
from the boats on the lake boys whistle in play
all these things
bring memories of you to mind.

Dragonflies, bumblebees
sticky red lollies and candy cotton,
fresh cut grass
coloured balloons
kites flying high, music nearby

Red lipstick purple mystic
diamond eyes
telling such lies
all on this critical day

Loving words spoken, so often broken
promises made, seldom kept.
Images of you
carved in my mind

Come my love take my hand
meander with me
make a stand

You told me you were broken
that I couldn't fix
yet it's me that's shattered
and patched up
with sticks.

Author's Note

I may well delete this pile of worthless words

Reviews

[Gone]

Worthless!!!???? How can you think that when it is shuch a brilliantly written poem. In the words of Rennay from 'Allo, Allo', "Words that turn a girls heart! And a man's stomach." LOL. This is a delightful romantic write. That alone makes it of great worth.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was not worthless at all, It was romantic and heart warming! Stating love for another!

[Sunny Skye]

I don't thik this poem is worthless at all. Very good i liked it.

[Ladysue]

I thought this was beautifully bittersweet...I loved your images and the so vivid. The last verse is tugs at the heartstrings...wonderful writing...

[Brianna Brie]

Are you kidding me? It is only worthless in the sense that it brings up memories that may want to stay forgotten. As a poem it is magnificent, but often our best work comes out of our shattered hearts. I like how you name the many things that remind you of the one you loved. It is like saying pretty much everything reminds me of you. Isn't that the way it is? My love is on my mind around the clock. Superb write!

[Angela Mulley]

I don't think it's worthless, I quite enjoyed reading. However, I do think it could benefit from being tightened up somewhat, there are just a few bits where the rhyming is off. But other than that, it's a perfectly good poem. Well done!

[luciddreamer]

I absolutely do not find it worthless words....I found beauty in the pain

[xjust-for-me.x]

hmm no it is lovely verse..all the lines work to make a perfect poem.

[InkSlinger]

Undetermined thoughts made perfect sense to me.. Loved the softness, and recall of the first few stanzas.. where memories fill our heads with fragmented thoughts. The last stanza really hangs all over you, and tugs at the heartstrings.. Enjoyed your simple fragmented memories.

[Kerry O'Connor]

Hardly worthless - a beautiful collection of memories almost too painful to remember but worth the emotional fallout, I think. The last stanza sears to the heart.