Hazel Bottom Wood

Just a walk in the woods

The woods were nearby, not that we as children were ever allowed to put foot in there, I dont believe any adults did either.
But children will be children, and me and Jeremiah Jones were always up to mischief, and although the gate that lead into the woods was locked up, we found a hole just large enough for us to climb through.
So most nights we went through, not far at first, for the woods were surposed to be haunted, at least thats what the old folks say.
Anyhow on April 30th in the year of our lord 18 hundred and 33, Jeremiah Jones and myself entered Hazel Bottom Woods at the stroke of midnight.
It was a full moon, and as we entered the forest, it seemed like daylight inside, so we walked deeper and deeper into woods, the animals, badgers stoats and the like were not afraid of man, they had not seen before. The grass was deep, and a stream trickled nearby, Thats when we heard it! a sound like horses pulling a coach, being driven fast down the road, except there is no road through these woods.
Well we hid in the clover, Jeremiah and I, holding our breath, hoping that coach would pass by, but it stopped, horses snorting and stomping their feet, coach door snaps open, the sound of feet.
Run shouts I like a crack from a gun, "run Jeremiah as fast as you can" well headlong we ran through bramble, hawthorn and hedge, till we were free of those woods, falling and panting gasping for breath, thats when I noticed I was alone.
Though many years have passed, no one ever saw Jeremiah ever again, though the older folks say, if you should walk by the gates of the wood at midnight, and listen you may hear even to this day, young Jeremiah Jones calling my name.
Not that Iv'e ever been back to find out.

Author's Note

This is only my second story, as I'm not really a story teller, please bare with me, how people writ long stories I'll never know

Reviews

[InkSlinger]

Actually, for a guy that isn't a storyteller.. it wasn't half bad. It had an authentic feel to it... not the feel of a guy grasping at straws to write a story just for the sake of telling one. It had a good pace, and very Poe like.. I could see myself as the story teller here.. Good attempt.. keep working it..

[A. L. Z.]

This is great! Eerie, and again, breif but quite interesting. It seems if you wanted to continue in way that might reflect those short stories of Edgar Allen Poe you might deepen some of ideas you already have, emphasize something of the effect this has had on the speakers mind/mentality after the fact? Just an idea. Looking forward to more short stories by you!

[Gypsy]

Nice writing, for only your second time writing a story, it's pretty good! It has a very serene and magical feel to it. You could probably use that has a prologue, since it's so short and write on. You could also add something in the end of this like, "I've never been back their to find out...until now", if your going to write on to this.
Nice job!

[xjust-for-me.x]

it is easy just let your mind go with the plot line and it will flow from your pen effortless. Nice story wish you would not leave the reader hanging lol

[Goodbye]

Cool short story! You kept me riveted...Yeah, there could be some brushing up or tightening up on grammar, but I still couldn't take my eyes off of the story, you had me spellbound!

[JulieNorell]

Wow! I got goose bumps! Good job!

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I like it..you have good story telling skills, I am intrigued to find out more..this sounds like the beginning.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

well written short piece~ great aura and concise vocabulary~

[Lilly]

Great story. Its short and to the point but you still create a great tone and feel...
Love the ending and how you kept the exact details of what happened to Jeremiah hidden from the reader. It adds to the mystery and 'chill' of the story.
Great work!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good short story. I like the dark woods. Always a possibility of a mystery. You wrote a interesting tale. Sometime it is a good thing to be careful to obey the warning of others. A excellent story.
Coyote