It's been a long time coming

An old poem revamped

When in the translation of emotions all feeling is lost When the wolf howls out of distress and flowers no longer bloom Where will you be? When days are long and the nights longer still and the moon no longer shines, so darkness envelopes you like a shroud Where will you be? And you hear the plaintive wail of a mothers cry for a lost or abandoned child and all the rivers have run into dried out seas Where will you be? Then at long times lasting, you turn your eyes to me to that vacant spot where you thought i would be then i wonder where will you be? When transgressions wear you down, and all hope has fled and mortality stares at you from that empty place Where do you think i will be?

Reviews

[Inkcognito]

Wonderful write - I ask these same questions over and over again!
"When in the translation of emotions all feeling is lost" A trend that seems to happening all too often. We misunderstand the intentions of the other, which leads to a breakdown in comprehension, communication and the subsequent drift between people, signalling the inevitable, slow but sure demise of a once perfectly great relationship. Tragic really...

[Liza]

heartfelt, thought provoking - capturing the essence of what it really means to be accountable and to be held accountable -

[Kerry O'Connor]

This is the question. Sadly, it has no answer. Very thought-provoking and melancholy poem.

[Crowley]

"When transgressions wear you down" thats a great line, never seeing whats right in front of us until its too late and then wanting it more than ever...frustrating and lonely. S**t, I've been here and more than once. Great stuff.

[Gone]

WOW! Linear this is really powerful. Completely 'rocks me socks'! Such Poignant questions!

[Graceful]

very good. definatly one of my favorites.

[....]

Pondering write here and quite chilling, you have made me think. Very well presented write.

[InkSlinger]

when hope has failed us, and we feel like there is nothing left, when we are consumed with anger, bitterness, and resentment, we ponder, we reflect, and we ask these painful questions.. we want answers, no matter the cost.. no matter the bitterness it leaves in our mouths.... it is then do we realize it's not the loss that we are angry with.. but the deceit, and carelessness in how they handled our heart. Your work always leaves me to ponder.. reflect on my own experiences, and reminds me that I am not the only one who deals with such pain.. Well done!

[Faith]

Very dark and unforgiving..but maybe we all need to suffer like this in real life..so that we can appreciate what we have and what we have lost.

[Coyote Poetry]

Many good questions in the poem. I ask myself daily where will I be tomorrow? What will I be doing? A very strong poem. The world need doers and active people in the giving of kindness and hope. A excellent poem with a very good message. Thank you.
Coyote

[Goodbye]

Wow - very intense, very bitter...a lot of pain here. Loved the interspersed one-liners between stanzas. Excellent poem!