The Last Goodbye

A sad tale of despair, and unrequieted love It is just a fiction

It's been a while since last i stood here

looking out at the waves

feeling the cold, bite into my hands, feet and nose

looking out at the oceans deep.

 

Wondering about you

thinking only of you

do you in your lonely quiet times ever think of me?

I will never know

since you left the skies have been so grey

the wind constantly cold

my tears have turned to ice upon my cheeks

 

I often think of your beautiful face

the words you spoke, so full of grace

Oh the way you made me laugh

and yes of our love making

your scent a fragrance so divine

the heady aroma of your breath upon my flesh

That special way you moaned and called out my name

at that almost celestial moment of sheer bliss

 

All gone now

Just this eternal bitter cold

as the sea finally envelopes me

takes me away from this pain you left inside

Goodbye my only true love

GOODBYE

 

Reviews

[Alicia™]

This is so beautiful… The flow is great, and I really love the choice of words. I can imagine someone standing near the ocean with their arms crossed.

Just wondering, was the change in the font size intentional?

[Brianna Brie]

All gone now
Just this eternal bitter cold
as the sea finally envelopes me
takes me away from this pain you left inside
Goodbye my only true love
GOODBYE

This poem builds up momentum with that second to last verse. Only to let you down in the bitter cold sea. You made me believe in the love and then it was ripped away. Very realistic to the way love often is.

[mir]

Very nice poem of a sad and painful ending that leaves only wonderful memories of what existed before---seen those quite a few times, myself. I like how you used the sea as your subject. Enjoyed it!

[thundergod]

from wer u get inspiration Mr.Xyz

[Im His Daughter]

I love it! Awesome job Linear!

[Coyote Poetry]

The sea and love. I went to the sea to forget. A very strong opening. I like the description of the ocean and the woman. The more detail made the woman come alive. A sad ending. Never a goodbye to someone who had touched our heart. A excellent poem.
Coyote.

[Sunny Skye]

I really like it and is kind of something that some people go true with someone they think is they're true love but might never be their's.

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. oh, this is so moving and poignant beyond measure ... the picture of a vacant vacuum emerges and sings the song of longing and loss ... beautifully written and exquisite in the intensity of emotion expressed ... amazing, just amazing ...

[JelliFyshKissUs]

You shouldn't have told us it was fiction. But for it to be a poem explaining feelings that don't reside in you, you sure do an excellent job selling it. Cold remembrances are always the worst. And this one shivers the core.

[MuSe Ampoule]

such a sad piece. Lost love always cuts so deep and this work illustrates this beautifully.