Gothic Vampire

A promt/ and a trial

In the land where all hopes and dreams

have faded like the early morning mist

 

When even daylight shrouds you

like the darkest night

here is where you will ever find my soul

 

Creeping through passageways

damp with the blood of the innocents

here is where the screams of the lost and lonely,

reverberate through hallowed halls

 

The stench of slowly decaying flesh

assaults my senses, I feel the ever present hunger

the thirst for that warm sweet nectar

that pulsates through your veins and arteries alike

 

Moving slowly creeping lowly

a shadows shifting shape

peering through the window pane

tap tapping lightly

waiting anticipating at your window sill

Reviews

[Graceful]

amazing...and creppy for that matter...but REALLY GOOD!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the dark tale in your words. You create a strong story in so few words. I like the flow and the feel of loneliness. Complete poem is outstanding. I like the ending.
Coyote

[CrashDavis47]

I love the language. keep up the good work.

[The New Girl]

This is great on so many different levels.
It is inspired and yet ... vulnerable.
I felt like though you claim you are what haunts the night,
You are more scared than scary.
But that's just my opinion~!
Take care,
Forever write,
The New Girl

[Ruth]

This is well written love, you keep a pace to it that attracts the reader on to many levels :)
Dark and yet full of beauty too!
Awesome hon
xx

[Lilly]

Beautifully dark - lovely imagery

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. ah, brutally beautiful ... (glad you tested posting blogs) ... these words just flow and flow ... and paint a scene with words that is haunting, captivating and a bit spooky too ... and of course ... the instances of alliteration are absolutely ravishing ... beautifully written ... (i think i'm gonna try writing a vampire poem too) ...

[JelliFyshKissUs]

That is so haunting... and a little sexy. Something about the dark wrongness of it all makes it so... right. Desire is desire, I guess... to a woman. Excellent.

[Cafe Reader]

A very good poem!

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creepy stuff..but so eloquently said..