Fortis Vadom Existo Debello

The Valliant Shall be Vanquished This has religious overtones

And if i write

shall i write with my hearts blood?

Perhaps i could write of loves sweet tenderness

Or it's deepest bitterness

 

May my pen serve well

my writing on this wall

 

Yet when all is said

and finally done

All is vanity

A striving after wind

 

If i should write a marvelous sonnet

or build a mighty bridge

My thoughts will perish along with bones

returning to the dust

 

For when i lie down (as we all must)

with my forbears i shall be the same as all

Just Dust

 

We may as well try and hold the wind

For The Valliant Shall Be Vanquished

Reviews

[JelliFyshKissUs]

And yet we all continue to try and catch that wind with are fingertips. Been bonding with King Solomon lately, huh? With all his wisdom, this is what he found to be true. But his very last words, the conclusion of the matter, was wisdom indeed. Superb writing. A delight to read such melancholy.

[Thea Fuentebella]

i love the "prophecy" like feel to this. very wise words, well said wow, bravo!
i'm inspired XD

[Cerebriation]

Awesome write! Nice to see someone who knows how to teeter on the edge of modern English. I'll surely read more, my friend.

[Terra]

nice:)

[emmajoy]

Before the dust comes the body .. we can't or shouldn't afford to waste it, just as others who know us appreciate attempts to leave temporary footprints.

Your writing here is powerful yet full of its own mystery .. 'All is vanity ~ A striving after wind '

[HopelesslyDevoted]

the title really caught my eye, great work of art here

[sarah]

We are all equal sometimes it's hard to realize, love this!!

[Disillusioned]

What truly matters isn't that we are remembered for something we said, wrote, or did... Truly, even if all of me is forgotten, so long as there are souls alive to remember or forget, means we did some small thing right and there is still a chance for a change away from our own destruction. All is vanquished, valiant or not...

I loved the write, btw.

[Angela Mulley]

A great read... indeed, all is equal. Love it!

[xjust-for-me.x]

we can try and hold the wind but we cant it is ceaseless in its path. Like this very much.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very powerful read!

For when i lie down(as we all must)
with my forbears i shall be the same as all
Just Dust


Very creative write!