Marie

Pure sillyness

Where did it go wrong Marie

We danced often in loves sweet ectasy

You said you were happy and laughed Marie

And you said you loved me, that it would last Marie

But he was younger, taller than me

his teeth were white, then you laughed at me

What did i do wrong my sweet Marie?

Bound in chains in prison Marie

You tossed your head and smiled at me

A twinkle in your eyes as you grinned Marie

Now in dungeons dark

will you wait for me?

For i'll see you in Hell for all eternity

Now that your dead my sweet Marie

Are you sorry you laughed at me?

Reviews

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. well, well ... women, i tell ya ... even i don't understand them ... once my ex sister in law said ... when you meet a guy and he has 16 out of the 25 things you are looking for, you go for him ... then you meet someone who has 19 and you go for him ... i gaped with my mouth open ... anyway ... this is beautifully written ... plays like a song ... and the bitterness just emphasizes the sweetness and earnestness of the narrator ... super neat work, mister poet ...

[Wondering Mind]

This reads like a lovely song; high notes on Marie

[InkSlinger]

You know... I think I really enjoy this lyrical flow.. Love how it rolls right off your tongue, with the repeating questions to Marie.. Super Job!!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

has an almost historical feel to the core pulse~ such a wondrous duality in its sing song aura delivering darker fare~

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. The ending took me by surprise. Love can make us do crazy and do wild things. I like the tale and the description at the end. A outstanding poem.
Coyote