Marie

Pure sillyness

Where did it go wrong Marie

We danced often in loves sweet ectasy

You said you were happy and laughed Marie

And you said you loved me, that it would last Marie

But he was younger, taller than me

his teeth were white, then you laughed at me

What did i do wrong my sweet Marie?

Bound in chains in prison Marie

You tossed your head and smiled at me

A twinkle in your eyes as you grinned Marie

Now in dungeons dark

will you wait for me?

For i'll see you in Hell for all eternity

Now that your dead my sweet Marie

Are you sorry you laughed at me?

Reviews

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. well, well ... women, i tell ya ... even i don't understand them ... once my ex sister in law said ... when you meet a guy and he has 16 out of the 25 things you are looking for, you go for him ... then you meet someone who has 19 and you go for him ... i gaped with my mouth open ... anyway ... this is beautifully written ... plays like a song ... and the bitterness just emphasizes the sweetness and earnestness of the narrator ... super neat work, mister poet ...

[Aven]

I thought this was a sweet poem, but no! :D

[luciddreamer]

Yea gotta agree with Crowley on this one, Psycho spooky...great write, felt the chill :)
Peace
Robin

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very beatlesque lyrics! I loved the playfulness of the wording...and how the story developed into a great ending...poor marie..

[Alicia™]

I love the hidden cynic in this. So wonderfully written, such a constructed character. It's very different, and that's what I love most about it.

[Marie Harrison]

Cool poem. I didn't mean to do it, really!

[Crowley]

Spooky like the movie Psycho I think...pretty damed cool and very memorable Marie. Yes...where did it go. Nice work here my friend.

[No use.]

you pour me slowly into sorrow's cup of tea, blackened and stirred 'round and 'round by the sticks and bones of dead marie and then toss me from cheek to tongue , down down down into the darkness of soul

[Anna]

Nice very intresting this was one of the few writings I realy wanted to read. Great Job.