Why Dont You See Like Me

A conflict between the sexes

Perhaps i should bleed my words upon the wallThen you might see, and even call

 

Maybe its you, though it may be me

Cant we wake up from this misery

 

You cast dark clouds at my feet

Are you hoping i'll retreat

 

Why dont you see

Yes see like me, then maybe we will both be free

 

Free to love like others do

Free to love each other too

 

 

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

if only~if only we could spend a day behind each others' ~ the world may at last learn what love is~

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I like the flow of the words. No weak lines in this poem. I like the strong beginning and the positive ending. A short poem with a very good story. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Ms. Gruye]

an immutable obstacle, a poem to be bled and then triaged.

[Lilly]

Ooh I love the first line :)

these sort of questions are answered by working with the one thwyvare directed at....

The only thing I would suggest is maybe a '?' should be added to the end of "Are you hoping I'll retreat".
Really nice work with this piece

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[Ed Hart]

the universe will not bend to questions that begin, 'why don't you'