Why Dont You See Like Me

A conflict between the sexes

Perhaps i should bleed my words upon the wallThen you might see, and even call

 

Maybe its you, though it may be me

Cant we wake up from this misery

 

You cast dark clouds at my feet

Are you hoping i'll retreat

 

Why dont you see

Yes see like me, then maybe we will both be free

 

Free to love like others do

Free to love each other too

 

 

Reviews

[InkSlinger]

We only see what we want, we only hear what we want... sometimes it takes screaming at the top of their lungs before we are heard.. Solid work my friend! Simple and right to the heart of the matter.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great write! Free to love like others do
Free to love each other too

Who knows what my happen if given each other a chance!

[Gone]

Sounds like marriage to me lol! Seriously. I see this piece is an emotive call to be heard in a relationship. However the speaker wants things on his/her own terms hense the second to last stanza. "Why dont you see Yes see like me, then maybe we will both be free". It makes me question if either side is actually listening.

Lovely rhyming couplets and the flow is delightful.

[Brianna Brie]

This is a sad poem about the age old struggle of yielding to love. Great expression!

[Sunny Skye]

Beutiful. I really like the flow to this poem very good.

-SkyeBlanco

[Esoteric Strand]

A very, straight-to-the-point, no frills poem. I think these lines worked:

You cast dark clouds at my feet

Are you hoping i'll retreat

[luciddreamer]

Wonderful write :)

Peace
Robin

[Marie Harrison]

The eternal conflict. Love this poem, especially the picture!

[Moflo]

This had some great word play in it and I think that's excellent! I can definitely relate with the topic, its very sincere and to the point. Great write.

[Faith]

there 2 sides to every story and we must hear both sides before we can decide on what to do..good write.