All You Can Be

In those narrow corridors of your mind
In the dark recesses of frozen time

Did you once think you would be mine?

On all fours you crawl before me,
do you think thats how it should be?

Stand up
Dont lean on me
Hold your head high

For you may see, you are far greater than me.

Author's Note

Could not format this or alter type!
I dont know why.

Reviews

[Chelsea]

I really like it! The formatting is pretty loose giving it a carefree feel to it!
I like the idea of "corridors of your mind". A clever line!
My favourite line, final one. I like in your poems how you always end so sweetly! A nice signature style!!
Your rhyme well and your flow excellent! I am a fan of this kind of poetry for sure!

[Poetic Beauty]

Now that is equality in a relationship. The last stanza explains it all in a few short lines. This is touching.

[Sunny Skye]

Very good i like it. Good job!

-SkyeBlanco-

[luciddreamer]

Beautiful :)

[cfix]

Type it in word you can format & alter it there.
This is amazing, such emtions are protrayed well.

[Marie Harrison]

I love this. To me it shows real love. Someone that wishes for one to be strong enough to stand on their own and be all that they were made to be. But it still conveys a sense of companionship too. Meaningful poem. Empowereing instead of overpowering.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great poem! It's always nice to have someone to lean on! Beautifully done

[Ladysue]

It is ok to lean at times..as long as you are able to stand up straight after wards...it is the getting up that counts... I like this overall as the title says...All You Can Be...I like this concept...very well expressed...

[Lindsey]

It's still pretty good. I like the encouragment of it.

[Wondering Mind]

it's always a blessing to have a loved one's help at the breaking point. Nicely expressed.
I never bother about type,(imo) it's the meaning that matters. The format is effective.