Pigeon Soup

Been there done that
come on home and kick the cat
follow cranes and ask for work
then hit the closest bar
chatter up the working men
shoot some pool
play some cards

The best time to ask is on a Monday
Hangovers create job openings
Most stores need sweeping or windows washed
Follow the cranes
follow the roach coach
then hit the closest bar

Spend a day at the dump
Hit on guys dumping sheet rock
If they can afford to dump stuff
There might be a job
Day old bread from bakeries
thickens watery soup
most car washes have
a place they dump trash from cars
check for pot plants
Seeds got to grow

Reviews

[Sel Whiteley]

You really show people's struggle to get by in the current economic dereliction. The pub scene, the seedy places, the pot plants, alcohol are all brilliantly drawn. The character's you paint are very vivid:

chatter up the working men
shoot some pool
play some cards

I can really get feeling of people getting jobs from drunken bosses.
'The best time to ask is on a Monday
Hangovers create job openings'
and the low quality food in:
'Day old bread from bakeries
thickens watery soup
most car washes have
a place they dump trash from cars'
You really capture their desperation. You can show life at its most negative with such eloquence and no sensationalism or melodrama. You rhythm and musical ear only reinforce this as always.