In Fire

Hopefully restored closely to its predecessor.

 

Shall we start a fire all along

Your equator or you meridian,

Using your fingers as wooden logs
And my lips of sparking flints?

 

As our eyes haze over

With the hiss of panting,

Will we catch the scent

Of our skin blooming in fire?

 

And what will we say

In the moment?  Our

Tongues would crackle

Like Egyptian parchment.

 

While the eyelash singes

And the tongue sizzles

Like a wet thumb against

A hot iron, and the breath

Escapes our chest,

 

Will we remember
That we hold no links
To perpetual Phoenixes?

 

In the midst of our collapse,

Will we look to the ceiling

Or will we fall from the bed

Scattering away from each other?

 

And as the flames quiet down

Just like a phantom fire

Dying in the middle

Of the forest, we will lie tranquil,

 

Only hoping
That in the silence
Of our ashen stillness,
We can learn to speak
With tongues
Of rising smoke.

Reviews

....Wow. This is...wild. Passionate and alluring. I'm trying to avoid saying sexy for some reason, but that's exactly what it is. It addresses sex and passion from beginning to end, and yet it teeters just on the proper side of the 'lude' limit.

I think I wanna share this. Great work, man.

[Maxinne Marie]

Exceptional imagery!

[Ragdoll]

Beautiful.

Only hoping
That in the silence
Of our ashen stillness,
We can learn to speak
With tongues
Of rising smoke

Amazing amazing amazing.

[Ashley Robel]

Wow...This is a beautiful piece of work. I was able to visualize every single thing you wrote in this piece. The word usage in this work is also amazing. You have quite a talent with description that I, myself, am still working towards.

Excellent work. I'm definitely intrigued by your style and vocabulary and am eager to read more of your work.

[Robert Luna]

You have again written a wonderful image driven piece. You have an uncanny ability to capture the imagination of your reader and display beautiful images that play out in their mind long after reading your work.

Great Job!!!

[Michael Lopez]

nice imagery......the metaphors are great too...
your poems are always wonderfull to read ......
keep it up....

[Greg the Bard]

I find this interesting. It is as always well writen. You are very good at imagery. In the first two Paragraphs I thought this was going to be a seductive verse. As I read it became apparent I was wrong. This if very spiritial. The tower of Babel is one of Gods greatest event in history. To tie it the way you have to these two people is wonderful. Great job.