Warrior

I have a voice and I want it to be heard. I was a foster kid and it was no picnic but I'm getting past the past and working to inspire young children in foster care.

Warrior

I remember those times you hurt me.

I was young, blind, and couldn’t see.

To me that was the norm of a foster home.

I still think about what you did, still getting chills to the bone.

I didn’t think I was being abused.

Until I grew up and didn’t think I was worth something just being used.

You’ve been giving me nightmares for years.

I had to resort to medicine and therapy out of fear.

Because of you I’m becoming a warrior.

I should probably thank you because I have a sto0ry that roars.

I write down my feelings with words.

It’s a new found passion that’s going to open doors.

I’m going to help the kids in the foster homes.

I’ll help them through it make them tough as stone.

I have a voice that’s going to be heard.

I am a warrior, a warrior to be heard!

                              Lily Lorenzo

Author's Note

As having experience in the foster care system I can tell you a lot of kids end up with PTSD and trauma from all the things that go on. people are so oblivious to what happens when a kid is put in the system. but I want to inspire and help those kids know they are worth something and can be something. THEY HAVE A VOICE!!!!

Reviews

[Beautiful Intentions]

Yes!! Be heard! This is a highly empowering poem, one brimming with past sorrows conquered by inner strengths, and by the close I had raised my fists by your side like, "Bring it on!" Absolutely love the message firmly and wonderfully delivered here... For anyone who has faced struggles, not only those who have suffered in foster care, but inspiring for ALL who have something to overcome. Your author's note is equally as superb as the poem itself, Lily. As a special needs teacher for several years, I had worked with children within the foster care system and there is much to be said about the changes that need to be made to better the lives of those seemingly overlooked by society at times. Rare cases have happy endings as seen on television, read in books. It is completely heartwarming to see someone like yourself out here, putting your thoughts and experiences into the world, restoring hope and giving a voice to the masses who have shared your same burdens. Bravo, Lily!

[lilylorenzo]

thank you so much this makes me happy to hear, i will keep writing and keep trying to inspire and help other kids.
lilylorenzo

[Schatzi]

Hello lilylorenzo,

That was a very emotional poem. I think you managed to get your point across and I hope that you are able to rectify the injustices you experienced as a youth. I have just one suggestion. The line: "I was young, blind, and couldn’t see." Blind and couldn't see is redundant. I understand that you want to keep the rhyming scheme you've established so leave 'see' but perhaps change 'couldn't' to 'unable to'. It stays true to your poem's meaning but removes that redundancy.

You have a good cause to fight for. Be the voice that makes the necessary changes in the foster care system. I wish you all the best.

Thank you for sharing!

Kind regards,

Schatzi