Jackie-The Porcelain god

Bulimic Jackie shares her thoughts on her body

You would think, after this long of living like this I would have lost more fat. Yet, still, it clings to my ribs and the bone of my legs. I'm so disgusting. It looks like im over due on a trip to the Porcelain god. get rid of these calories that run through my blood like my little sisters hampsters green tubes. Adding fat cells to my thighs and stomach. Yes, my offering to my god of thiness is over due

Author's Note

ehh, its ok

Reviews

[Emily Rose]

Ah a snippet into the life of a bulimic. I agree with Papa Mick - it's nice (although a little scary) to see that she's so callous about what she's doing. It's not what we normally see.

To make it better, though, I would recommend that you fix the capitalization and punctuation errors: there's an "I'm" that currently just looks like "im," "thinness" is spelled wrong, there should be a period at the end of the piece (or, if you perfer, an ellipis) and it might be more effective if you capitalize both "porcelian" and "God" to make a more dramatic statement.

Well done, though.

[Summers Under The Old O..]

Hmm. I understood it the second time I read it (after I saw she was bulimic). It's not my favorite, but it could make a good story. I think the line "get rid of these calories that run through my blood like my little sisters hampsters green tubes" is worded oddly, but if you fix it a bit it would be a really good...simile, is it? haha. I think it could be turned into something good. For now, it's just decent.

[Mick Parsons]

She's deliciously apathetic about her situation... I like that she's not a whiny, crying-for-help bulimic.