void

...on the edge

I came to the edge
of the abyss
you presented me,
looked over
and teetered ...

 

..?

 

Had you thrown me a line
I would have ventured.
But you left me
gazing into the void
you created,
and caring not -
let me be
standing there
without a hope ...

 

and I ...
stepped back ...
and forward
and back
and forward
and back...

Author's Note

No - no poetry here...

Reviews

[J]

The uncertainty you portray here is definitely a void as you say--a wavering pendulum in matters of love, in matters of your heart not knowing where you stand. As it is, it seems you're slowly sinking into quicksand...

I've been much like this myself recently. It's... a frustrating situation to be in, for sure.

[Tracie Skarbo]

Is she really leaving you out on the ledge? Or is she trying to get you to take a leap of faith? Trying to open you to another side of yourself. One mans void is another mans bliss... Sometimes rope slows you down...

[Anthony M Smith Jr]

To be all alone and to fear the unknown! I am at my best at these times in my life. Sort of testing myself and realizing I do not have any limits. Very nice words and made me think back..

[Raef C. Boylan]

I like your use of ellipses; I go a bit overboard with them sometimes, but you've got just the right amount.

Thought this was good:

"and teetered ...


..?" - great line there

Remember that Alton Towers [or was it Dryton Manor?] advert
"Don't...look...DOWN..."

[Doug]

tangoing with the edge...very interesting piece.

-doug-

[Emily B]

yes, poetry here, awesome stuff, really.