Inhale, exhale

I                                     You

hope                               doubted

my                                  ever

only                                I

regret                             that

is                                    is

that                                regret

I                                     only

ever                                my

doubted                          hope

you                                 I 

Reviews

[J. Randall Dodd]

lib,
i like the experimentation. very cool. nice message as well. i kinda took it as a person looking in the mirror and assessing their life. may not be what was intended, but that's what i took and thought it was cool. i hate to nit, but i'm not sure if it was intentional for a meaning i don't quite understand, or an oversight, but the you is capitalized in the reflection. just wondering... great work though!

sincerely,
jr

[The XYZ Writer]

This message has a great meaning to it. It makes me rethink a lot of things. Thank you for writing this. Its a great poem, and has a nice structure.

[Ubiquitous]

I love the way you used the form to fit the title. It looks great, and I love the message!

[Lorraine]

Written with such a unique structure. True to its title, it really does have an airy feel to it. This is a brilliant piece, done with creativity. The shortness of the lines didn't hinder the telling of something meaningful and touching.

Keep Writing. ^____^

[Michael X]

crafty, makes the reader want to pick up a pen and try writing one of these cool poems, you did a stately job, keep up the great work.

[kewlbluetiger]

Very artistic. Loved it!

[S. G. Webb]

This is incredible... One of the few works on this site that I have enjoyed.

[Devons]

This is like a key! Simply cryptic like a profound quick-crossword puzzle.

It seems to imply that the thought turns back on itself again and again in a cycle.

Interesting and cool to look at!

[Zatoichi]

your words form a gauntlet of hope and despair. it will take a hardy soul to traverse such a treacherous pass. if you find that soul, hold on.