For C.

She lingers,

lost in a memory.

 

My lifetime

stands in the snow

armorless

waving goodbye.

 

Death smiles,

and takes another bite of his cookie.

 

The lepers laugh,

it's just another day. 

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Interesting... This is certainly a concise piece, and I do enjoy reading this style of poetry, though I always find myself wanting to know more for some reason. Just a few more "telling" lines and I would feel completely satiated. With that said, the imagery here is fantastic, especially:

Death smiles,
and takes another bite of his cookie.

and

My lifetime
stands in the snow

--both great images that were hard hitting in terms of emotion.

Overall, nicely done. :)

[Myenigma]

could you explain the title? is the leeper laughing because he understands the feeling of being unloved or lonely? while death is just waiting... mmm cookie..

[Donald Meikle]

Thank you Libby. I read and enjoyed. (I just lost a near and dear friend)

[Emily B]

perfection

[Tai Ryens]

Short but very meaningful piece, I really like this. Especially with it's play on symbolism and how you connect such complex things, then turn them into simple meanings. Priceless.
I love this piece, it's just, simply put, amazingly beautiful.

[Emily B]

Death smiles,

and takes another bite

of cookie.



Lepers laugh,

it's just

another day.


Or maybe not. I always play with my words so long. Moving them here and there. Couldn't resist.

[Katie Foutz Voss]

Such a short piece, but still meaningful. The images of snow and death tied together are always very powerful. This piece, short as it is, reminds me of 'The Book Thief', my favorite book. Maybe you'd read it? (If not, you should. It's incredible. I've read it three times, and I don't reread books very often.) Anyways, this reminds of that. The story involves snow, and a very sardonic Death character.

I especially loved the part about Death eating a cookie. Almost a childlike characteristic. Very nicely written. :)