Air

I feel this thing beneath my ribs

like a churning cloud of smoke

I feel it in my palms, between my knees,

within my very throat

this sensation I have failed to explain

been unable to put to words

is it emptiness or is it pain?

what is this feeling in my nerves?

my bones no longer stand as tall

my eyes don't gleam as bright

my words don't roll like they once did

my mind goes mad at night

for ages, I have pondered and searched

my hands, they've both reached

I feel, I always come so close,

then go back to the beginning

I feel as though I'm missing something,

there's a missing piece to me

I need the answer more than air,

because without it I can't breathe

-l.r.

Reviews

[Devesh]

I feel a void inside of me
that's sucking my being inside
hopeless, I can't help but scream
for someone to stand by my side.

This is what I could gather from your words, the feeling seems to resonate. Thank you for sharing, well penn'd! :)

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you!

[Devesh]

You're welcome! :)

[Sapphire Naylor]

Well written. It allows the reader a lot of visualization which can be hard to do in a poem. Nicely done :)

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you:)

[Raymond Federle]

I enjoyed this very much. The 4th stanza kinda threw me a little cause it broke the rhythm but it's still very good! :)

[Lexi Richard]

Yeah, sorry about that, there's no definite rhyme pattern, I sort of just wrote it on a whim... and thank you!

[JessicaGadziala]

Wonderful work here. Great job.

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you!

[Laminators Dubai]

That was magnificent and powerful my friend...just wonderful !

[Lexi Richard]

Thank you so much!