The Dragon

Darkness is one with my Soul

as the blood keeps

dripping from wrist cut for you

Keep drinking, you may have

all I have to offer

Never spoken a word of complaint

freely given to you

with a smile in my eyes

The more you drink

the more we become one

So keep drink, as much as you want

my blood from my wrists

which has been cut for you.

The dragon will obey your wish

my fire yours to command

your enemies mine to destroy

So just give me the word

Author's Note

Please be honest on this one

Reviews

[Laura Sparkle]

The dragon will obey you wish --- I think you mean "your"
my fire yours to command
your enemies my to destroy -------- and I think it should me mine,
So just give me the word.

Heh, I may be way off on the corrections, but I love the obedience, the loyalty in this piece, and the sacrifice. A definite favorite. Nicely done! :)

*Sparks

[Amy Carrington]

Wow. This one is so strong, yet a little bittersweet, because you have to hurt yourself to feed their love for you...wonderful piece of writing.

[The Tao of Bri]

POWERFULLY Done! Great reciprocal nature of giving all! Surrender to the emotion and protection found in it~!

[Pink Poison]

This is very interesting...I love the lines"

The more you drink
the more we become one

Are you the dragon? The first line "Darkness is one with my soul" makes me think that the dragon is a part of you. The imagery of someone cutting their wrists and letting someone drink from them is reminiscent of the sacrament...drinking wine as if it were Jesus' blood. I think you have some great, very subtle levels to this poem. It can be read many ways.

I think that the last line weakens the poem. It seems out of sync with the rest of the poem, but that's just my opinion. Either way it's a great poem!