The Past in the Present

 

The scheming snakes has

risen rotten skeletons

buried deep beneath

years of icy debris

 

Testing my forged metal

with true lies in their

words of absolute denial

trying to bend brake me

 

Sharpening my blade

is the only sure result

they are getting in a haste

waiting for the time to be right

to use it on them for the blood that

has stain the once green field

for every sin has to be paid

in full before the crushing

hands of this demon

stirring in my

darking

soul

Reviews

[Pink Poison]

This is great. It really makes you feel the determination and fear of the writer. I love the first stanza and the second keeps up the tone perfectly. The knowledge that you must fight an old enemy is there and I absolutely love this ending. The words darking soul are very powerful. Great poem, keep them coming!

for every sin has to be paid
in full before the crushing
hands of this demon
stirring in my
darking
soul

[Solar]

A sense of avenging injustice buried under 'years of icy debris' pierces through the poem with a 'testing of forged metal'.

Just a small point - 'the scheming snakes 'has' ' or should it be 'have'?

[Leran Vakem]

On this account I want it to be has, for some or other reason "have" doesn't feel right to me

[pal]

A lovely thought, well expressed.

pal

[Natalie C]

The message is clear and yes one can smell the vengefulness in the air.

ad how one's past sometimes just insists on being a active part of one's present. I really loved the way the first two stanzas built up to the ultimate battle which is inevitable as your last so clearly states ...

Great flow and as always your imagery's spot on carrying the emotions one cannot ignore, fighting our demons we must whether they come in human form of just exists in our minds!

Nice work, I really loved this one in its full intensity

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship P..]

WoW, I love the dark image you have set forth. I can picture it all in my head. Well done, very wonderful.

S.D.Blankenship the GOTHICCOWOY