Autumn Muse

On cadence sweet, your beating heart,

on dreams and knowing soon---

rests safe in harbor, in old man art.

You and I and harvest moon,

in breathless autumn whisper---

on cadence sweet, your beating heart.

Plead that now, I most contend,

at leisure's well announced---

on cadence sweet, in old man's art.

Words that flows as rivulets,

on down the paper's slide---

rests safe in harbor, for old man's art...

rests safe to dwell... in muse's heart!

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Reviews

[Robert Haigh]

This is a kind a villanelle, with its double refrain. Most villanelle poems consist of 19 lines, but some shorter versions do exist, for example Elizabeth Bishop's "One Art" which has just 13 lines, as yours does here. An interesting poem!

[Leo Elderkin]

Thank-you Robert. You are correct, it is meant as a villanelle that has my own unique evolution of a traditional villanelle. My reasoning is that in trying to stay within the rigid define structure of a type of poem, a writer has to become unnecessarily verbose in conveying their feelings succintly. I intentionally evolved the style for history to point out the gradual relaxation of European based rules.

[Robert Haigh]

Interesting idea!