Tonight

I was visiting my cousins in Florida: Hayes, who is six, and Beckett, who is four. The night before I had to leave, I went to their room to say goodnight and goodbye, but ended up falling asleep.

Tonight, I fell asleep with my boys. I had intended just to put them to bed, kiss them goodnight, and say goodbye, for I would be leaving early the next morning, and would not see them. Instead, as I lay next to Beckett to rub his back and hum softly to him, he turned towards me, tucked his small head under my chin, and nestled his face into my chest. I lay my arm around him, and Hayes, in his sweet, subtle way, found my hand and gripped it in his. I relished the moment, as I lay there over the covers, a gentle breeze from the ceiling fan cooling my warm body. I felt their bodies rise and fall in the disparate rhythms of their breaths. I squeezed Hayes’ hand once, twice, three times. As he squeezed back, I dozed slowly off to the sound of crickets chirping faintly from the open window, and rain pattering lightly on the roof, and the low, lonely whistle of a cargo train in the distance. But then the spell was broken. There was boisterous laughter from the adults in the living room. Hayes twitched and woke, and pulled his hand from mine, for they had grown sweaty with heat. I gently extricated myself from Beckett so as not to wake him. I gave each precious boy a kiss goodbye on the forehead and a whispered iloveyou, and silently slipped from the room. When they wake in the morning, I will already be on my plane home to New York. I may never get another chance to hold them as I did tonight, but I will never forget.

Author's Note

I feel like a lot of my sentences have the same structure... Also I can't think of a good title (I never can)... please point out grammar mistakes if you see them... All criticism welcome :)

Reviews

[Imperfect xo]

aww very very well written, i love the description, it put a lift to those powerful words u used, very well done xox

[Liefje]

thanks so much for the flattering review :)

[Imperfect xo]

No Problem :)

[EverleafOwl]

That was very sweet! I could practically hear the summer, and feel the gentle love of it...so lightening! I'm never one to give criticism on grammar (not my strongest point), so......i thought it was fine! Nice read! ^^

[Liefje]

Glad you liked it. I was really striving for sensory description when I wrote it. Thanks for the review :)

[EverleafOwl]

Your welcome! ;D