IN BETWEEN

twilight is gone

the dawn is breaking

a man lost in between.

 

now the sun is reigning

and soon be fading

a shadow is playing in between.

 

few finds the way 

and few chose the right

the man lost his soul in between.

 

Reviews

[Hiddenfire]

i compact little powerhouse with a very nice ending that ties it all together. Loved it.

[WhiteWillow]

Beautiful piece, short and simple.

One thing...I would change "finds" to "find."

Otherwise, perfection.

[Emily B]

an outstanding poem

[xSamilynnx]

i like it... its short and simple... nicee :)

[Michael G.]

I'm very familiar with the particular time of day you describe in your opening. It is a time for decisions and deep thought.
I wonder if it could somehow read a bit differently if rearranged somewhat? Not that it doesn't read well now.
I like your thoughts... and your ability for expressing them.

[Shy Girl]

I've read somewhere that the 'In Betweens' are the shadows where other beings dwell. Like the tweens in doorways and that one moment tween night and day. Inside the tweens anything can happen..inside the shadows are a depth that goes on endlessly..but we are blissfully unaware..we pass them as though just a dark spot along our walk...but the unseen is the author of those stories ...this poem is so sad and emotional to me ...I liked it very much...thank you for the RR :) (I may not have read it correctly though..It's what I saw as I read your poem :)

[Kara]

god, you're poetry flows so well. (but, I think there's a typo in line 7?) anywho, i love it. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting poem. The In Between leave time to find other things to do. I like the hint of story in the poem. A very good poem.
Coyote