One Day

One day, I'll wake up
not wearing my body
not having a heavy baggage
to think about

One day, I'll see myself
for all I see now is vague
and all I want to understand
is incomprehensible

One day, everything will be nothing.
Everything will be still and calm
and silent
a euphoria.

One day, I'll know everything
but I will be contented
and stay still and calm
and all will be nothing.

Reviews

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Hello you :p

You did comment my poem. I thought it would be nice if I comment one of yours .

Allow me to offer you an advice: do not use long words (e-g incomprehensible ), try to be more specific / or go more deeply into what-ever is that you are writing about.

You did well establishing a concept (it gives the feeling to what you are writing about).

Hopefully that helps.

[sunflowerpalette]

Hi :) Thanks for your comment and I'll keep that in mind :)